Feel you move,dancing
makes me smile.
Just between us babe
am really scared.
I'll give you life
together we will grow.
Love's bonding unconditionally
with grace from above.
Author notes
Picture is prompt from contest.
A contest entry
- hey this is my first quickie by Aliya Abbas.
300 points, ended June 29, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
What a great creation. So very deserving of the gold. Congratulations.
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Good title. I think we all need help beyond ourselves at times as parents. Beautiful first lines, love the active "move, dancing" and "smile." True love is "unconditional," and definitely, "together we will grow." You targeted in on some great aspects of parenthood. Enjoyable write.
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something tells me that
that this is something a female would understand than men would so I feel like it was a look inside the feeling of a woman that a man doesn't often see, good write
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How well you share the feelings between a mother and her child in the womb. Beautiful imagery! A wonderful write!"
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Another mook moment in history
I am not a dad, I do not know what it is like to have to help a mother prepare for birth. This piece is pretty awesome. Great job. -
Unconditionally beautiful sentiments here..
All the best!
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C
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this is just beautiful. as beautiful is the feeling of being pregnant. which line i like most? i should say it is very hard to point out. every line speaks oceans. thanx for entering.
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A mother loves unconditionally. Thank you so much for sharing this beautiful piece. Juls
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oh what a precious write about motherhood. Yes it sure can be scary but that unconditional love can move mountains.
This is perfect for the picture.
All the best with this
Gaylene
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