Heaven folds into wild blue,
perception's skewed romance
time becomes sea's sentiment
as ripples render false images
Cycling whirlpools define ocean's age
knowledge's tomes circle inside
storms arise in a referenced eye
ships troll with bookmarks as bait
generations of waves heave relentlessly
crumbling silicon's crystal castles
naive youths persist creation
servant sentries with bailing pails
The sun ponders long, orbiting miles
evaporating layers on the tempo of clocks
just when the truth's almost exposed
hourglasses invert and Apollo is lost
Author notes
80 words on the pic:
In search of lost time by mihai82000, found on Deviantart.com
In a list
A contest entry
- ** Picture Inspired**... Semi Quickie..reserve and give me a poem within 24 hours....It's is metaphor,Imagery & Depth time again :) by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
300 points, ended June 21, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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So you do abstract just as well huh? Never doubted it for a second. Love, C
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great
very nicely laid out and worded...thank you
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very well done
I think you a wonderfully complex and intricate piece of what you see in the picture. I had to really go back and look at the picture closely (and missed a lot of by glacing at it quickly) as it helped me see why you as did and did with great style. Image and Visions
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Ooooh! Such an intricate piece of imagery and abstract depth of intensity. Great play on words, truly thought provoking. I found this to be such an excellent take on the image - an outside the box sort of write. Very nice!
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Why thank ya sweets!
Glad you liked it.
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Excellent
Good luck on the contest!
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This is amazing again! You are shining bro with your talent and creativity!! I'm completely impressed with this.. it's wonderful!!
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unique,! marlouvous!
its a very simple subject,very short, but yet its very long in a way, & uses imagery 2 blow u away! -
Beautifully flowing words and universal imagery of the ongoing perplexity of the human race. Especially enjoyed the way 'generation of waves' ties into the picture, also 'the sun...... evaporating layers on the tempos of clocks.' Many layers of meaning to sift through here. Your work is exquisite.
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Masterful
Outstanding in so many aspects. This and others I have read of yours are multidimensional and leave a good feeling in the senses. You are very talented,Though I know you don't need me to say that!
wolf
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extremely well written
i am impressed with the vocabulary you have used in this write. it is wonderfully perfect in all aspects. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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Wonderful metaphors flow within magical words... A truly beautiful creation... Best of luck...
Ken
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You know what I think.
A wonderful penning. Enjoy.
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Gee's Dan...now this is very much so what I asked for...just mesmerizing and with a lot of depth, words...Loved --
naive youths persist creation,
servant sentries with bailing pails
well I loved the whole thing, but that just stood out a bit more heh
Thank you so much..This is definetly one of yours I shall be visiting again
Good luck
Cindy
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Gahhhh this was amazing. Your metaphor is out of this world- brilliant. By far, one of your BEST writes.. one of my faves though they all are this one truly stands out. You took the picture and created a formula that measures true capacity. Loved this,
"The sun ponders long, orbiting miles
evaporating layers on the tempo of clocks
just when the truth's almost exposed
hourglasses invert, and Apollo is lost"
Best of luck; surely to grab gold!! -
Good luck! tell me when your done
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I know you're not on right now but I'm done!
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