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A Trace Of Color~

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To free my flutter,

I take flight
searching for a song,

I hear your whisper

like a harp
softly humming over hills
strumming my name, tenderly

as daisies sway
to a sunrise serenade

as the wind carries my love

on faded wings
my heart lies helpless

in your hands.~



♥♥


~

Author notes

title prompt :
"a trace of color"


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  • jasminerose
    July 6, 2008

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    Sigh~ Just stunning! A beautiful piece of poetry you have penned from this title! Absolutely love the ending!
    Truly remarkable and ever so touching to the heart!
    Thank you so very much for entering my contest!
    Jasminerose


  • astralshepherd gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    there are magic words we use, as writers, to evoke and invoke a response, seeking some ressonance within the reader, some kinship of soul - when it works - we lie captivated by the response, that someone read and felt something because we dared to expose our heart-words to the world...your poem, lifts this soul and encourages in ways you may never realize, but know this, it is a wonderous feeling to be captivated by your words.


    blessings and best wishes,

    ~r.


    • poet2angels gold member
      July 2, 2008
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      Such a beautiful comment!!!
      I am so thankful and humbled

      Lynda


  • kaibab silver member
    June 24, 2008

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    In Jazzy's prose you are a rose,
    a smile to wake the eastern morning,
    forming hope to spread in wing,
    this flight through yonder wish, I sing

  • Desert Knave
    June 20, 2008

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    Excellent !

    The lines which struck the strongest chord with me were " ...I hear your whisper / like a harp /softly humming over hills / strumming my name, tenderly ...". The musical analogy was just prefect. Best of luck in the contest. ~Jim


    • poet2angels gold member
      July 2, 2008
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      TY, Love...I adore the word whisper and even just the thought of a whisper makes me sigh so I use it often


  • Errant Panther gold member
    June 19, 2008

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    not much left to say but this was so soft and gorgeous I could only sigh and listen for the gentle music of the harp on the breeze.


    • poet2angels gold member
      July 2, 2008
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      and I would playu the harp for you if I could ...It seems such a beautiful instrument and romantic


  • Frozentearz
    June 19, 2008

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    Ooh so very beautiful I have missed reading your poetry. I'm glad that life is slowing down here so I can play a massive catch up so soft and so very beautiful.
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


    • poet2angels gold member
      July 2, 2008
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      TY my friend! *Hug* It always brings a smile when I see you visited and feel your words

  • kaibab silver member
    June 19, 2008
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    Such a poem from such a heart...light and feathed a subtle breeze inhaling love


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    June 19, 2008

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    This is so lovely. Strumming so potent it moves both the heart and the daisies --- such a vivid picture, and beautiful thought. Helpless indeed!

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