Icarus Up
Young man, old man, maze
Why not death by Minotaur?
You get wings instead.
I love you father
You tied a string to an ant
Sent it through a shell
The Day Pan Out-Played Apollo
The musical palm
Deserves to be his because -
-He never gets laid
Hooves, horns, and Pan-pipe.
King Midas shall judge this match.
He enjoys ass-ears.
The Disfigured Blacksmith Is Loved
A forger of steel
Kept by Love herself, becomes
Aphrodisiac.
Hecate, And The High Hunt
Curved evil breasts
Anticipation full moon
Starless sky lover
Oedipus' Last Glass Of Bubbles
She squats over it
And then, of course, so do I...
Incestola pop
Achilles, Mothers, And Rivers
Look me in the eyes
When you tell me you love me
Gods, and Mothers lie
Baptized in the Styx,
love will hang you by your heels
In Greek tragedies
Prometheus Sang For Vultures
I gave you my fire,
And look what you did with it?
Love is for the birds
Aries, The God Of War
Ram horns crash, hoving
Whet stones sharply grind, census
Mars in retrograde
Icarus Down
Sticky new feathers
Do not frown at me old man
Time to touch the sun
As I freed from you
I became what we all are
Swallowed by the Sea
Author notes
Written December 31st, 2003
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~scrolls back up to read again~
Oh, my. Funny
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ahh, I love mythology, this was quite the read. Intruiging actually, nice to see intelligence out there. Thanks for entering.
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Congatulations on your win
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Great write, keep it up
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I wish I were more versed in Greek mythology. I understood some of your allusions, but I didn't get them all. I am sure that they are all brilliant, and I enjoyed reading even though I couldn't fully appreciate your clever references.
Edited on Jan 04, 4:44 because 'Sounded illiterate'. -
very cool shit man
made me laugh
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a well thought out write on these creatures of mythology. You obviously know your stuff and used your talent to put into this great write
thx
Reenie
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I adore the way that you have written this, really phenomenally written and you have written of a subject that has always interested me greatly. Mythology hold so much truth in it I believe, interwoven and of course for us to determine. Anyway, I ramble, the writings were wonderful and I love your grasp of mythology. Thanks for entering.
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Yes, it means to form or grind down.
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Since you put this into my contest, I've gone over these haiku several times trying to get the full grasp of what you're communicating by amalgamating them all into one poem. I see some portions of the journey, certainly, but I still must admit defeat. This is a very good write, but I can't quite grasp all of the concepts within.
Only one critique, if it could be called that. "Hoving" in "Aries, God of War." Looked it up in dictionary.com and couldn't find a definition. Does it actually have meaning, or was that a mistype? -
excitingly unusual stuff here I think it may be a littleover my head otr it may be that I am trying to read more into than is there...at any rate////I like it///good luck freda
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No, actually they are all haiku and senryu with each one's title inbetween.
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Thanks for entering. Interesting write. Experimental verse? Not exactly what I wanted but still a good write.
Laide -
This is a really neat collection of haikus, they can be viewed individually, but are definitely best together. It was neat how your tone varied from section to section, sometimes reverant as if you were humbly re-telling the myths, other times putting a modern, almost scornful spin on the events. good job
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I like the way you got deeper into the stories than the usual tellings, and in such spare word structure as well! I've saved this one, to share with other people I knwow who are into Greek myths... you clearly have a good understanding of them.
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Wow, very impressive. I love how you both start and end this poem with Icarus (he's one of my favorites, heh). Loved how you didn't just stick to one myth or figure in mythology. Great poem. Thanks for entering it in my contest
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good riaght it is a hard thing to mix hasty with porty good riaght keep it up and if you cant read whate i riaght tall me k am k
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wow...
that was really awesome. so thoughtful, so intricate, so seemingly effortless.
i've always loved mythology; not enough people write poetry about/for the gods. i myself wrote one for Phyllis, called 'On Almonds'. it's so cool to see that someone else is writing about all this. =) also to see that they're writing about it well.
loved it.
♥ -Kat -
i love mythology...i luv ur work, u'll totally be hearing more from me
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WoW! You are an intricate poet with a mighty sword. This is excellent. Mythology is very introspective. Excellent write my friend. Very fitting of poetry and it's muse. My pleasure to have read your work.
Denise
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yep this is my favorite
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Oh wow. This piece actually made me smile. It's so grand and how it started and ended with Icarus was just classical. Great job, have a grand new years!
Eowyn -
Dude, happy new year, and thank you for your
interest and appreciation. Poetry is the only thing that
really makes me happy as far as art goes, that's the tip
of my mountain, the rest acting etc... is just on the way down.
It all feeds the same valley, but I will die at the clouds for
poetry not in the delta for man, not this time around. -
i think this one is my favorite of yours but then again you have a buch of good ones happy new year hope u drink till you puke
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The disfigured Blacksmith is loved
A forger of steel
kept by Love herself, becomes
aphrodisiac.
--I think this is my favorite one, Hephaestos was always one of my favorites, because he's the "odd man out" sorta thing. Hades however ...now theres a God...
The only question i have is about this line : She squats over it
....what does She squat over? and who is She...i dont recall a squating "she" except perhaps the Sphinx...but that could be something else...
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ah this was fucking awesome really, i'm surprised at the lack of comments. very well done.
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