Attached to you by feelings and emotions deep inside,
by sharing my secrets, I once could only hide.
A friendship like none I have ever known before,
You live in a special place, right inside my hearts door.
I would hate to ever lose you, I couldn't stand the pain,
it took so many years, to finally find you once again.
If only for a moment, I could see you face to face,
I'm sure to be content, when I feel my heart start to race.
A hug or the touch of your hand against mine,
would surely send shivers down my spine.
But to tell the truth I feel closer to you now although apart,
than when I was fifteen years old and thought I owned your heart.
Author notes
Written for my closest friend that I once dated at age 15! LOL
A contest entry
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What a sweet poem. Funny how you dated the person at 15. But still, very nice. I am glad that the person is close to you, it really does help to have someone close by. Which is why I love my friends so much, because they all seem to get close. =) Keep on writing, until you can't write no more!
xXDCXx
~Make Peace, Not War~
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You really captured the essence of an old flame that has become a dear friend. It is great when it works out that way. great job on this one.
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Good work Ellan!
Good job on this one Ellan! Hope you will get a gold on this. I am sure this was a fitting tribute to your friend! THANKS again!!
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well... if i had more friends, i'd understand.. which makes what im about to say a little more ironic, but this write does give me inspiration to write something cold.. not really though.. thanks for entering and good luck.
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Very well written Ellen, and what a great tribute to your friend. It shows a lot of emotion, and it is obvious that you were very close to him. Thanks for sharing the story with us. Enjoyable reading, and a heartfelt write.
Big Hugs,
Ron
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I love that last line ... the whole poem is very touching. thank you for entering
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precious memories
May they stay forever in out hearts....mac
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This is so touching and so inspirational!!!! When I was reading this piece my mind reflected on many, but the one that it fit the most was my husband, Art... We married when I was 14yrs. old and he was 17yrs. because we were in love, no other reason.. He was taken from me and out three children by death when he was only 30yrs old.. He was my husband, my best friend, my confidant, etc.. When he died I thought I would die too, but I couldn't I had our very small children to raise..... Loved this piece!!!!!! Thank you for sharing!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I would hate to ever lose you, I couldn't stand the pain,
it took so many years, to finally find you once again.
If only for a moment, I could see you face to face,
I'm sure to be content, when I feel my heart start to race.
This is very nice. With this particular stanza, I think you could have done a whole lot better. Your thoughts are there, your heart is too, and the message you truly want to convey is cristal clear, but you've spent too much time trying to find the right words that rhyme, you falter and slip a little.
Over all, I do like it. You have a fantastic day.
Even the way you whisper is poetry, rhyming is beautiful, but using odd words or creating a free verse is a lot more beautiful because you get to let your heart spill at its will
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Aw, this poems is adorable and perfectly flowing! Well done
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Oh those first loves are the best aren't they? This is a very heartfelt and emotional write. You have done a great job putting your feelings onto paper here. I have some strong memories relating to this too. Nice! Blessings, Patty
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really great ^-^
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aww lovely poem! it is very touching i must admit and its great!!
thanks for sharing
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Excellent!
A very touching poem dedicating a lasting love through the years. Emotion and imagery go hand in hand to express the truth in memories of the heart. Great job! Don
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