Warm brew in womb,
thoughts swimming
like fish in shallow water
slipping through grasping fingers,
Sighs dipped in
perfect concoction
of delight and satiation,
sprinkled with
clear sunlight,
like a blessing.
A contest entry
- hey this is my first quickie by Aliya Abbas.
300 points, ended June 29, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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It is amazing this journey of life how it starts out so small just a few cells ... fish eggs embryos small fry both swimming growing the journey of life has begun....and yes it is a precious blessing for those blessings I am thankful.
Excellent take on the prompt. Nicely crafted....Good luck in this contest.
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Thank you very much!
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incredible write, i really like it, i like the line 'thoughts swimming
like fish in shallow water' as you could almost say it is the baby swimming in the womb too and thinking of ways to get out and see mummy. I love the last line too, babies realy are a blessing. all the best in the contest and good luck in future poetry writing xx -
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Thank you for your lovely comment..you caught all the double illusions I put up there..Glad you agree with me!
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that was beautiful.
complete justice to the pic.
love the way you took it.
thanx for entering.
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