He sees her across the playground during recess.
Him in his overhauls, her in her calico dress.
He walks up to her and she pushes him down.
Her pretty blue eyes captivate the farm boy as he gets up off the ground.
On this day he tells his mom she is going to be his wife.
He made plans that day on how they would spend their life.
Years go by and they are hardly ever apart.
As the love grows day by day completely filling up their hearts.
The high school sweethearts eventually marry and start out on that life.
Daily building year by year an unbreakable love as husband and wife.
As years turn into decades and child by child they build a family.
As the love they started decades ago grows into a family tree.
But as the years go by and they grow older their love grows yet stronger still.
And after a full life together in every cell of their body an immense love is all they feel.
And even though they have lived way beyond their prime.
They are so happy just to be living for forever a decade at a time.
Author notes
a story of my grandparents who inspired me on what true love should be. option 3
A contest entry
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Comments
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tis a very beautiful poem
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aww, this is so beautiful. i really love all the ideas behind this, childhood sweethearts staying together for so long. i like the rhyme in this, it helps with the flow of the piece. you hold such beautiful imagery throughout, but especially in the beginning few lines. thank you, i truly enjoyed reading this! - ElectricBloom
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Oh, this rmeinds me of 'imprinting' from Twilight (if you've read the books..).
Nicely penned!
Keep the good stuff coming.
~ Overcast.
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I love this poem. and how it's about your grandparents finding true love makes this poem trully amazing. it's wonderful how true love still has a place in this world.
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What a beautiful tribute you have penned for your loving grandparents. In your words you can feel their love, embracing of their lives together yet as one. This is an awesome piece poet! Great write! Mar
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That's a very sweet poem. Not many people stay together, anymore... It's nice to know that love still has a chance in this world. Great write, keep it up! -
I really was drawn in by the title and then held to the end. Sweet graphic and wonderful write. thank you for entering
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Cute, and sweet. A very beautiful write on long lasting true love. Thank you for this wonderful entry.
Serenity
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It sounds like these people found true love and happiness in eachother. And you know that does make me hopeful, because the world is filled with so much hate and shallowness and the need to go fast, that sometimes I think people forget love exists. Thanks for sharing.
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I missed this, line 5 should be "On this day "she" tells his Mom she is going to be his wife" or "her" Mom, I'm not sure which way you were taking it. Maybe you even meant, "On this day he tells his Mom he is going to be her husband." Just thought you might want to know to fix it. Your grandparents were sound so cute when they were in love. I'm glad it worked out for them, many times high school sweethearts breakup because college comes next and then they go on and find someone else. I know I said it once, but this really is such an amazing poem.
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This does sound like how true love should be. It is a very sweet story and very descriptive. I enjoyed reading. Thanks for entering and good luck
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This was such an amazing and sweet poem. Is this what happened in your life. If not it is such a nice story that you put into it. Thank you for entering my contest.
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wonderful wonderful wonderful wonderful can not express the word wonderful enough. I absolutely enjoyed reading everything you wrote here. True poetry at its finest. I'm not very good at poetry myself, but I love to come on this site and see refreshing work like this absolutely spectacular. I have a way of reading good poetry more then I have a way of writing it. Its a gift I guess lol. Keep up the great write and I will keep on checking out your poetry.
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that's great!!! i love the story!! and it being a true story makes it even greater! nicely written!
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ichigosama
that's wonderful. my grandparents fell in love just like that. unfortunately my grandma died 13 yrs ago and my grandpa is still alive. he's 90, he'll be 91 in december. good job and thanks for entering!!!! -
it's still a wonderful write no mater how many times i read it
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VERY VERY GOOD!That is so so so sweet! -
are'nt grandparents wonderful
true love never dies,even as one passes on the other mourns, you penned this with great tenderness and yes love, thank you for this sweet entry...good luck
Lin
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This is beautiful.
Only it's not what this contest was about,
I'm sorry but I have to DQ you.
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Great this is a perfect love story i liked it alot. So describeing i have seen people in my not so many years who have been together for it seems like forever. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck. ..<3.. Shelly
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just wanted to say condrats, this was a hard contest to judge
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that is so freakin adorible! realy i loved it, it takes alot to make a marriage last forever especialy this dayn age, thanks for entering
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This is very sweet
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Awww this is so beautiful and sweet. Innocence and progression and lifes greatest lesson - love. I love the message that to take things slow and to show your true feelings, you can make something last forever, even from a young age. My aunts friend Fran is 58 and married to a man called Paul - when did they meet? At age 12, been dating since 14 and never stopped!
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Very sweet, tender, and loving. It tells such a cute story, almost like a country song. A very well penned rendition of your grandparents life.
Blessed be,
Serenity~
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Awww...this is precious, and so cool that you had a living example in your grandparents to inspire your thoughts on love. ***Pam***
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Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Wow honey makes me wish I could be that lucky! Beautiful write!
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