Aboard
ivory wings
we fly above the skies,
you and I will find sweet rides of
passion.
Author notes
A Cinquain is a short, usually unrhymed poem consisting of twenty-two syllables distributed as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, in five lines.
(Source:
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html
A contest entry
- Cinquain by Yemassee.
554 points, ended June 21, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Your message is quite clear, love gives us these fits of passion, rises us above our normal state. I would think, flying "above" the sky would be a high level of passion indeed!
I hope it is true now and always. Thanks for entering the contest.
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mummy this is a beautiful write and I absoltuly love the way you have used the form and is one I will never ever be able to do.you have used sweet and beautiful descriptive words that pain a lot of emotions and images within the readers mind and it holds a lot to it as well. well done mummy you always impresse and inspire me to continue writing
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Ok well this is one form even I may be able to do on my own but not quite as good as this. Love, C
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