Tentacles sweep tender strokes
of an artist's pallet slowly churned,
light bends prismatic in jellied veins
as colors storm in swarms of frenzied guppy
Tongues drip psychedelic buds
contrasted bright against depths of midnight blue
kelp kiss is vivid in salted greens,
on kaleidoscopic fragments of mirrored dreams
Water blends celestial dew,
convulsing rays of cosmic propulsion
bobbing rainbows rendered perpetual
across the endless jazzing hues
Author notes
40-75 words on the picture
artist credit:
Nature by ~holyinferno
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie; Picture Prompts, 15 entries! by perfectsunset.
600 points, ended July 21, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Your imagery and depth of metaphor are perfect but then you always have that quality when you write. Love, C
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oh gees im glad I pulled out lol
I got a good pic, just struggled..and couldnt give her what she wanted...but boy this is more then she asked more in my opinion..Brilliant..so much imagery,metaphor,depth..everything
Gold..I see a gold
lol
Cin
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awesomeness!!!
good luck in the contest!!
my fav part was :
Tongues drip psychedelic buds
contrasted bright on depths of midnight blue
kelp kiss is vivid in salted greens,
on kaleidoscopic fragments of mirrored dreams
so was
Water blends celestial dew,
convulsing rays of cosmic propulsion
bobbing rainbows rendered perpetual
across the endless jazzing hues
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What a cool title! You described this picture perfectly, and I mean that perfect part sincerely, too! Beautiful word choice, and the way you weaved the words to make stunning phrases is delightful. You better do well in your contest, lol!
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Superb
Wow, this is a great write in regards to the photo. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one.
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man...it only gets better the second time i read it
really great weltt!!
i just barely submitted my poem for this contest...lol ...eh we'll see what happens...this is a STRONG contender
best of luck!
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Wow
An amazing poem to go alongside a wonderful picture. I am always impressed with peoples poems that are inspired by a quote or pic, I always struggle with them.
Great poem.
Del -
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Have such a bad memory lol I alrady commented lol
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the imagry in this poem is incredible, ur a truly talented poet and this is such great work, well done and keep it up. well done
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Wow.. again.. this is amazing... the references to the sea are fabulous and the imagery outstanding... I'd have got nothing from that picture.. you got something amazing!
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Great
I love the way you take the most normal of sensations and make them seem so much more, you take the bland and make it elegant
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Elegance
Beautiful poem written so elegantly.
My favourite part:
"Tongues drip psychedelic buds
contrasted bright on depths of midnight blue
kelp kiss is vivid in salted greens,
on kaleidoscopic fragments of mirrored dreams"
Del
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You have an amazing vocabulary. All of your words provided such a stunning and vivid depiction of the sea. during the second stanza particularly, I could picture everything so clearly! bravo!
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Bravo!!! this was just so amazing!! I think this is on my top ten for you! It just flowed so smoothly and the imagery was... wow..
And the vocabulary you used went really well with this write. It didn't seem like it was forced or anything like that.. Amazing! Best of luck! worthy of gold for sure..
Angel
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vibrant vocabulary and vivid crayons ... you describe beautifully the image ... oh so very gold worthy.
I love this pic as well ... how something so painful to the senses could be decked out in multiple hues ...
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excellent!!!~~~~~~~
wow.....this is SUPER cool..I think that's the best way to describe this poem
It was hard to pick...but i think my favorite lines were
"the kelp kisses vivid in salted greens
of kaleidoscopic beams on mirrored dreams">>this read really fast, and with such vivid imagery..I think you really captured this picture really well!
best of luck in the contest!
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Damn, lots of awesome words used to write this...e.g. prismatic, psychedelic (love this one in particular), kaleidoscopic, cosmic, propulsion, perpetual
Just...wow.
Anyways...your poem describes the picture perfectly--there's a slightly insanity feel and so much color wonderfully expressed...the only part I wonder about is whether "the kelp kisses vivid in salted greens" could be switched order-wise with "of kaleidoscopic beams on mirrored dreams." I think it sounds groovy if they were switched in that stanza...just an idea.
Good luck
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Thank you so much for this picture. Had so much fun writing. One of my favorites by myself in a long time!
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