She smiled with her eyes
and for once, I knew why
She brushed her hair,
stuffed the post-it note in her purse,
turned off the light and walked out the door
I knew she would return
We weren’t strangers anymore
Author notes
picture prompt...... http://allpoetry.com/contest/2409711
A contest entry
- PIF Picture/ 15 poets-40 words by jasminerose.
900 points, ended June 21, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ooooooh bummer you didn't win. Thios is wonderfully written, Lol did your dream woman ever come back?
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An intriguing take on the given prompt. Creatively penned!
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A very clever and creative take on the picture!
Your imagery is so wonderfully written! Loved the emotion that comes from this one!
Beautifully penned!
Thank you so very much for entering and sharing your talented pen with us all!
Linda
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Can be taken as a feel good or a paid off moment between a man and a woman lol...rather think I like the first idea rather than the latter. Love, Cheryl
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This is good work. It was Byron who once said, unless you have been stabbed in the heart, don't bother writing poetry.
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This gives a sense of satisfied completeness in an endearing way. A nice sort of feelgood poem, Leo
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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everyone is still a stranger to some degree. even we are strangers to ourselves to a point. but i like the message. the imagery is simple and yet tells alot. nice write.
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A Ha !
Oh how I enjoyed this brief but potent poem of yours! It holds pizzazzzz for thought and my mind sensed the sincerity within the message. Very nicely shared! joy
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Strangers come in many different ways, don't they? You can know someone very well, yet when/if they share
an intimate time with you.....you are NOT strangers ever again.
Good job.
Cheryl
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