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Implications of clouds

 

 


Seems someone laid a desert over my sea.

But the ocean, surrendering itself, 

left its seed in the skies,  

tripwired calm,  like brimming eyes

so sensitive, even a butterfly’s breeze
might trigger torrential release.

So long as I refuse to forget,

This barren scape may yield life yet.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • poetryality silver member
    June 29

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    "Seems someone laid a desert over my sea"

    What a contrastingly beautiful line! There are more...

    The entire second stanza is brilliant! (A Poem within and of itself).

    Congrats on earning the Emerald Cup!

    Last lines are the topping...sweet!



    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee

    BTW - Did you give Obama a hug for me or what?


  • secberm
    June 28

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    "Seems someone laid a desert over my sea."

    Excellent imagery, sis. Pretty "steamy" i-"mirage" you put down. Write on.

    Dez


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 20

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    A wonderful unique and out of the box piece.
    Beautifully penned and full of emotions that reap
    Thank you for your entry and best wishes
    Julie


  • moluv10
    June 19
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    Wonderful write here! so full of imagery!! Best of luck in the contest.


  • JustBreathe gold member
    June 19

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    "Seems someone laid a desert over my sea."

    What a vivid image this conjures up for me! Sometimes, during difficult moments, it can seem that what was once like a fluid sea teaming with movement and life, has been replaced by dry, empty barrenness. But wisdom and experience has shown me that 'what is' is not necessarily what will 'always be'. There is always an opportunity to change ... to find life's joy again.

    "So long as I refuse to forget,
    This barren scape may yield life yet"

    Wonderful write! Good luck in the contest!




  • Mirthryl
    June 19

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    Lovely title. Excellent imagery. Outstanding "tripwired calm, like brimming eyes so sensitive, even a butterfly's breeze might trigger torrential release."

    Thoughtful concluding couplet. Refusing to forget and relinquish ones dreams, visions and intent can sometimes patiently (with a lot of work) transform seemingly overwhelming impossibilities into beautiful new realities.


  • Peteskid gold member
    June 18
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    excellent...PK

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