Were I but a Hummingbirds’ dream,
~ Your moistened, parted lips ~
Would beckon as unfurling petals;
Of the Promised Land.
Dreams’ sweetest nectar,
Savored by God’s
Delicate gift;
Of self tenacity.
A contest entry
- PIF - Free Verse Word Prompt by Dalaney.
850 points, ended July 4, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful write. I liked the part of unfurling petals. It seemed metaphorical in a way, like comparing the parting of lips to the blooming of a flower. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
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SAvored by the God's as a delightful dish! If only I was a hummingbird! Cute and very direct! ~Sie
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Whoever you are dreaming of she sounds as though she is pretty well known already to you anyway
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Very nice...Lovely imagery.
Im sure she will love this entry.
Many blessings
~A~
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