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Artistically Broken

In-scope of riches
I sold my soul to the devils
...if only for a moment

scented fragrance faded
sour of illusions were evident
in so many careless strokes
poetic epiphany crucifies aura
of daydreams
tasting the last breath

Moon-bathing now echoed
in black foliage of nameless regrets
blooming over pieces of mutilated conscience
lulling me within lagoons of oblivion

notes of painful revelations
stinging like shards of glass
burning along with my soul's mosaics

Spherical swollen reminiscence
rambling like nostalgic words
a nameless tattoo
bruising me forever

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  • xeroabyss II
    June 23

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    This makes me think of how some writers can weave the most seemling beautiful poetry from such tragic grieves and restless sorrows.


  • Death Reaper ver. 6
    June 17

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    this write-up reminds me of a friend of mine... your style is very similar to her's... I like this one... you did great; imagery is very effective and good... write on poet... Good luck to you... :-)


  • emoempess
    April 20

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    superb:)

    "scented fragrance faded
    sour of illusions were evident
    in so many careless strokes
    poetic epiphany crucifies aura
    of daydreams
    tasting the last breath"

    love this part...
    your poem is good..amazing!!
    but i cant really understand your poem...
    overall "boombastic" poetry
    thanks for the entry
    enter this poem called
    "the power of darkness"
    http://allpoetry.com/group/show/the+power+of+darkness


  • Ignored
    November 28, 2008

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    Thanks for entering!

    My mind just imploded after reading the last line. I really really loved this poem it was a masterpiece of words. However, I think you have entered the wrong contest. This was an incredible write and this might be a bronze winner. Thanks for entering!


  • SchizoChic
    September 30, 2008

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    Very vivid imagery! Great job writing this. I liked it alot. I'll put it in the finalists. Best of luck.


  • The.Tango.Emily
    July 30, 2008
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    Great write
    Thanks for entering


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    July 30, 2008
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    I really like the thought you put into this.


  • PonyPride
    July 16, 2008
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    wow very poetic and full of work play, excellent write, i will add this to the finalist list


  • daviscth silver member
    July 14, 2008

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    There is wonderful imagery in your piece. I can see why it's won a couple of cups. Thank you for posting in my contest.


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    July 3, 2008

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    Let me tell you, I love Papa Roach! That song is one of my favourites, and you have done it justice... I'm not much for whiny, wrist-slashing poems, but this is probably the most un-cliched self-harming poem I've read in a long time. Your word-choices are perfect, and you totally deserved that bronze trophy. Well done, and into the finals for you... Thanks for entering!

    Laura


  • Metaphorist
    June 20, 2008

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    I'm not one for cutting-related poems. They always sound so cliche. But yours is absolutely fantastic. Thanks for entering.


  • KayJay
    June 19, 2008

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    Powerful methaphor and image... I love "a nameless tattoo bruising her forever"... what a great image. Wonderfully done...
    Ken

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