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The complexity of simple

Simplicity lies inside

 

…bubbles

 

popping in fields of a child’s mind

snapshots collected in breathless exuberance

 

earth revolves around innocent promises

a touch of giggling whispers upon ears

 

…suspended

 

inhales of home-comforts

in sync with facial expressions

moving across iris

dissipating into blank stares

wide-eyed wonder

 

feel of gentle rain on tongue

while spinning

uncovering magical moments of mystery

 

follow it ~

pitter-pattering footsteps

 

on a personal journey

through a secret passage in the attic

of greens and blues

 

…like the color of poetry

 

complex

yet

so simple

 

 

 

6/18/08 

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Prompt: simple things

A contest entry

Attempting to be poetic again...what was I thinking?

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  • toomysterious
    July 5, 2008

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    This is beautifully poetic. It flows from child-like wonder in bubbles and exuberance to the taste of rain and on, to other journeys back in time when the most important things are the moments you remember.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    July 5, 2008

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    yes, it was a very literal take, my favorite lines,

    "on a personal journey
    through a secret passage in the attic"

    i'd like to see you write about some of the simple things you find there, like C.S. Lewis in his wardrobe...

    this is so direct in its attempt that is actually works, nice entry here...

    al


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    July 2, 2008

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    This is lovely. You took simple things and revealed the magic in them--a perspective not encumbered by the cynicism of the world--like the visage of a child, or a poet. Wonderful.


  • Cat gold member
    July 2, 2008
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    you really took the idea literally
    which is neither good or bad
    just different and unexpected- which unexpected is always good-

    you have painted some lovely imagery here- a treat for the mind's eye.

    so glad to find this and you here in the contest-
    mary


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    June 22, 2008
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  • Grunts Girl gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    oh those secret passages


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 20, 2008

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    beauty of greens and blues
    pronouncing things so true

    emerald green and pastel blues are my favorite shades
    never, ever shall my decision of such ever fade


    lovely poem of children, most

  • Rowan gold member
    June 18, 2008

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    I agree, this is simply beautiful. If only we could look at life like that again.


  • DogFish silver member
    June 18, 2008
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    ...words that delight like soap bubbles in the sunlight!


  • Randomly Beautiful
    June 18, 2008

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    Poetic indeed. Love it. It even looks pretty.


  • albymyheart gold member
    June 18, 2008

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    Your poem reflects the title...Simple yet with complex thoughts in it's description. Very well penned and well thought out form. Well done and good luck...alby

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