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Tasting Rainy Whispers

Outside, sun's belly is  bidding her farewell
rain starts to fall
leisurely pouring horizontally,
silver in the dying sunlight
each drip drop, a colorful vignette
of touch and sentiment
memories of love that's never been
pigments that discolor my soul

Dancing shadows slowly creeping across the sky
leaves were moving like passing people,
restless and hurrying
somber branches swaying in tune of heavens tears
while greenery in the garden watching
odorous winds are weaving music of mournful sighs
silent reverie clutches me

Pouring of the rain brings you back
haunting my loveless dreams
plunging fingers in my somberness,
feeling your essence around me
a personification of my suffering
weariness shallows my body

mute grey clouds is my silent narrator
spilling lonesome illussions of loves tragedy
caressing tired thoughts
how will I face peaceful tomorrow
when most of times I tried to find you
everytime the rain falls


Author notes

Prompt - Rain

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  • xeroabyss II
    June 23

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    Sometimes even the most heavy torrential downfalls cannot fill the hollow void of a loveless existance.


  • Heavens Child
    April 20

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    I love the title. You've penned some really great imagery here. Best wishes and thank you for entering.


  • Merry Christmas
    January 14

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    Wow, I love this. The imagery is just so perfect and so beautiful, it describes rain so well.

    Thanks for entering.


  • Rhythm Child
    November 19, 2008

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    A great entry
    thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent so take care

    message me for anything
    Billy (Rhythm Child)


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    This is a beautiful dedication to the rain, you created some beautiful pictures for the reader, be very proud of your two gold. Best to you


  • daviscth silver member
    August 25, 2008

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    You must be so proud of winning two gols for this amazing poem. I enjoyed it so much. Thanks for your entry.


  • Night Terrors
    August 8, 2008
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    great job on this thanks for entering


  • rosie4491
    July 26, 2008

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    Splendid piece! Wonderful imagery. I love the ending. Best of luck in my contest.

    Keep it up =]


  • Mekhala
    July 8, 2008

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    Beautiful...I just loved it...it gave me the whole feel...how beautifully penned...i loved the following lines the most:-
    "silent reverie clutches me,
    pouring of the rain brings you back
    haunting my loveless dreams
    plunging fingers in my somberness,
    feeling your essence around me"
    Thanks a lot for your entry!
    Keep it up and good luck!
    Regards,
    Mekhala


  • takemypainaway
    June 26, 2008

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    wow what a dedication to the rain it is so empowering...
    "mute grey clouds is the narratory
    spilling lonesome illussions"
    this was my fav part you use a very good comparisons
    thank you for entering
    **KAT


  • darell
    June 23, 2008

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    Very Lovely!

    This is a rapturous piece that
    sings melodies of majestic wonder.
    I love the tenderness and passion
    aswell as the brilliant attention
    to detail. It was as if I were experiencing
    the moment with you. An excellent write.
    Exquisite! Congratulations!


  • crimsondew
    June 23, 2008
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    I love your title too!

  • crimsondew
    June 23, 2008

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    Much enjoyed

    This had splendid imagery of the sky, sun slowly giving way to darker clouds...
    towards the end, you add a personal touch of emotion..like the feel of the whole thing..
    Thank you for entering my contest!


  • transit
    June 22, 2008

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    wow!

    The imagery is awesome and I really like the story. The rain does have something magical to it and this poem personified it beautifully.

    "leaves were moving like passing people,
    restless and hurrying
    somber branches swaying in tune of heavens tears"

    such beautiful imagery as with the rest of the poem. I hope you do win something for this is a lovely poem. Good luck!

    transit~


  • KayJay
    June 19, 2008

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    Another brilliant write... You have such a power of imagery that it's impossible to read you without feeling the emotions you've caputured in your words.
    Ken

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