there's something warm in this envelope
the paper feels sunburned and smooth
the ridges sticky with heat dissolved glue
i run the card edge beneath my bottom lip
i close my eyes and see the rails
breaking their backs for the train
the open windows breathing day's end workers
the overpowering aftershave of the newly pubescent
i won't open it
i write my message on the outside
send it back, untouched
i want to receive it again
on a better day
Author notes
bah. this is only here because i cannot be bothered to copy it yet and hide it!!!
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is wonderful! The descriptions in the first two stanzas are excellent. The reader can see and feel what's happening. The last stanza ended well - made perfect sense to me! I don't think it needs any revision. Definitely not a "return to sender" LOL
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an interesting piece ... trying to determine what it means, and then making it make sense to me ... your ending reminds me of things that come before we are ready for them ... wishing to send them back to revisit on a better day.
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Wonderful and purely poetic
Hey, remember me?
This is a very beautiful little piece!!!
I'm glad to see you up on the screen again!
xo
wolf
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