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André

A brilliant, little star is born
Minutes later he flickers, then blinks out
Leaving me helpless, hurting, and torn
Immeasurable joy, replaced by doubt

Nine months of waiting ends in pain
How could he die, right after his birth
Leaving me, his mother, with more than I can contain
Crying here, feeling like I have no worth

Why could my son not have a chance
To experience life, the ups and downs
It hurts to see his father's stance
Dejected, alone, amidst happy sounds

It hurts to go on, but what can I do
Our child is dead, we can't go back now
Give me strength to see me through
I still can't stop just asking how

Rest In Peace André Timothée Le'Dupont

Author notes

This is about my baby boy who died about two years ago. He died about 10 minutes after birth, and I keep wondering why my child didn't get a chance in life. It hurts so bad, but I know that he would want me to move on, so I'm trying. I'm really trying.

I chose option 4c.

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  • FunnelWaxFate
    July 23, 2008

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    Very emotional and powerful write…the deep lament and sorrow; the anguish, so haunting and tragically real…very affecting write. “Leaving me, his mother, with more than I can contain/Crying here, feeling like I have no worth” These lines really reminded me of how my own mother felt when she spoke of her lost son, Christopher. Having been born too early, he died prematurely, and the anguish and deep scarring it caused was dredged up from this poem, very familiar, very upsetting and all too real… There seems to be no greater pain than this… Very eloquent words to portray such an emotional and harrowing tragedy. Definitely stirred a great deal of emotion and sadness and lament in me. Very well done!


  • gothicchildren05
    July 10, 2008

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    I am so sorry to hear that you did not get your chance......or your son didn't get a chance. maybe God knew in a way that he was suffering for those ten minutes and tried to make it better the best he could. It must have been hard for you and must still be hard for you. all you can do is never forget and if you have more children, just let them know of their brother.

    thank you for entering and good luck...and God bless.


  • Rogue
    July 3, 2008
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    This is an excellent poem. Thank you so much for entering; I'm so sorry for your loss...Blessed be, and know you will be in my thoughts as well as your son.


  • BlackSwan
    June 29, 2008

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    so sorry for your loss, miscarriage is a terrible thing.
    Wonderful, hear wrenching write

    -GL in contest


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 27, 2008

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    Aww... I am from a family of four kids sadly two of those kids died soon after birth the questions in here kinda reminds me of my mom. She moved on great she just thinks about it once in awhile. So i hope you move on. Well this poem is very well written and i like it alot. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly
    and again sorry for your loss


  • TeenageTears
    June 24, 2008
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    oh my gosh! brilliant! i loved it! you are a wonderful poet! so sorry to hear about your loss tho x


  • enitsirhC
    June 21, 2008

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    My deepest and most sincere condolences go to you and your family.

    That being said, this poem is very well written.
    You have a wonderful way of translating your feelings into words.

    Good luck in your contest.


  • MargaretG
    June 21, 2008

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    I offer my condolences. A baby is more than himself, he is a symbol of hope and the embodiment of dreams. The loss is magnified by its connotations. Your poem describes the emotions clearly - grief changes everything in life. I wish you new hope and the courage to grasp it.
    I agree with Pretani, some of the lines seem chosen to rhyme with the ones before. Either freer verse or more metaphoric language could improve this poem. Best wishes.


  • MrsJones
    June 21, 2008

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    Amazing poem, it really touched me. Losing a child has to be one of the worst things a parent can go through, I cannot begin to imagine how it feels. I hope you find peace and the strength to move on. Thanks for entering.

  • celadia
    June 20, 2008

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    Oh my God, I really feel for you, that must be the most awful thing in the world to lose a child. So sad, I hope you have another one, it will never replace but will help the hurt I think. My cousin's baby died of meningitis, they're happy with their next baby though.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 20, 2008

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    oh my I am so sorry for your loss
    I dont know what to say except this is great writing and really tugs the heart


    Delila


  • Heath Thompson
    June 20, 2008

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    Hello again Kayne. This is hard to say considering the subject matter but I think that rhyming poetry can lessen the impact of the subject matter. Having to rhyme forces the writer to limit word use and this sometimes serves to reduce the emotion.

    The poem in this form and pace seems to carry the reader in a matter-of-fact way - you glide over the words in a sing-songy way that slips you over the meaning and depth and makes it seem like it was written about an imagined fact rather than a real fact.

    I hope for you it was the former and not the latter.


  • Anneintherain
    June 18, 2008

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    Losing someone is heartbreaking. I can't imagine how it is to lose a child. It's a beautiful poem and you express your grief so clearly. There is nothing I can say to make it better, no words can really ease anything...so I won't. Good poem.


  • ShaShay
    June 18, 2008

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    Sweet Write

    I share with you the feeling of loss. But know he is in a better place and try to find comfort in that. I send you hugs over cyberspace and wish you the calm after the storm.

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