Oh Sweet suicide
Your teasing words touch my lips,
Pain
Heartbreak
Sorrow at my fingertips
Soon I will be gone from here
When I shed that one last tear.
You'll hear me screaming in agonising pain
let it be ..
Let me die in misery.
The rope hangs loosley
Around my neck it's tied
One last word ..
Your name I sighed
I step off the chair
My time to say goobye.
My body filled with shame and lies,
You stand there wishing you didnt cause the pain,
You remove my corpse,
From the spiderweb of
Hate
Of anger
Heavens lane
One last glance at my face and you know
That you too will have to go
Rearrange the slipknot ties
Your soul slowly upwards flies
In a split seond your with me too
Our pale faces both knew
We did wrong
We had eachother
We just had to stick together,
So we fade into the light
Hand in hand
Stay close hold tight ..
Let's escape into the dark lonley night
Author notes
"Crazy Monkey"
I chose the qoute
6 ♦ "She never thought death could be so petty.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Beautiful description, enjoyed the reading. None of it sounded awkward, it was all natural and flowed easily.
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This really comes close to what happened to me and i can relate to the feelings. im still not over what has happened. i have to admit im pretty messed up over what happened. i never thought i would ever feel this way. well as bad any way and thats not even close to explain it. because of what happened i feeling like im slowly dying.
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this is great! good luck in my contest!
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This was interesting... It had some really spectacular moments, though I would highly recommend checking your spelling and grammar before clicking the 'submit' button. The millions of errors did put me off a bit, but the poem itself was good. Best of luck in the contests.
Laura -
Wow such a chilling love story!! Very beautiful!
I really love the part,
"Oh Sweet suicide
Your teasing words touch my lips,
Pain
Heartbreak"
Very touching!
Great job!!
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This reminds me a lot about one of the main characrters in the book, who you never actually meet, but this... sounds a lot like him. There's a lotof emotion on this, I like that. Thanks for entering!
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this really was amazin, great imagery i luv the lines "o sweet suicide your teasing words touch my lips" awesum way to start it
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