Cold canyon
Deep Into the Mountain
Across the Lake Granite
Cold Stone Heart Lost
Into the Scenery Host
to the Tree Watching
the River Toss Hopes
Life Reality's Hold
blatant Destruction
on Self Ideal Darkness
of Self Defeat Lost in
the Moment as I watch
the River Run The Great
cold Granite Canyon wall
Once The Heart
Author notes
Made off of a Word Prompt Cold Canyon
A contest entry
- The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1668 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Preeetty picture at the top!!
I really like where every line led up to, describing a place that was once warm and loving, like a heart, or a heart itself. The only problem I have is that some of the words seem like that need more on them, like 'the River Toss Hopes" tosses hope seems to be like it would fit better. Is this a sonnet?
I think without the form this poem would be better! But as it stands, it's great =]
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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yeah its a sonet i uaed the form a few times and i agree the form itself is to restricting i think to the poets point of view when writing even though every once in a while it is fun to step out of free form to write in a form
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You did not follow the rules I set up for the contests. I sent you a message previously and you never changed it. That is why I did not comment. It has nothing to do with being a gold member.
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I liked the stream-like flow of this poem. It all worked very well and really helped with the overall tone. Best of all was your word choices that painted a very visual and vivid picture. well done!
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Rules:
No religion bashing.
No rhyme.
No centered pieces.
No blatant porn or macabre.
No unreadable fonts & backgrounds.
No cliche please.
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oh well weather you liked it or not the contest gave me a good poem....... even though you didnt comment on it like most poeple do.. oh but thats right your a gold member you dont have to comment on other peoples stuff i forgot
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Wow babe!
This was dark, yet not as dark as your other poems. You always write such sad poems when I know that you have some happier stuff hidden inside. Other than that it was amazing.
Love yours only,
Amadahy Rayne
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This was well written. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing it with us. I think you may have a chance of placing in the contest.
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