Oh doorknob, your class is so bruised
So important and yet so abused,
No knowledge or say, in by who or what way
You are taken for granted and used.
But doorknob, I want you to know
When I use you I just start to glow.
You do so much and more, just to open a door
And so many don't even know
Im sorry for what you go through
With so much that you are forced to do
A wondrous device, with a feeling so nice
Why you're treated so, I have no clue.
Author notes
I realized how much I appreciated doorknobs, after one fell off and I was locked in my bathroom for 2 hours, and how much we take them for granted. When I saw his contest, I knew I had to ener, so here you go...
A contest entry
- I want poems about doorknobs. by SmartBrick.
540 points, ended July 4, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Chuckles madly!
This is great & so creative. I think your presentation could be better to make this pop. I'll send you some suggestion. I like this & I don't think I could be as clever writing about a door knob! 
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Well written...
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Simple, elegant and completely true! Your language was perfectly humorous and the rhythm was very appropriate. I truly enjoyed it
Kudos!
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First off, I would appreciate (and I know others will as well) if you would change the color of either the background or the font because it's impossible to read. Second, I love how you were able to take something so relatively meaningless and personify it. It was very well done. It's true, we do take them for granted. But I think I take for granted locks even more
Sincerely,
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Very nice.I once got locked in the bathroom...It was either the doorknob or that i used so much soap that it was ridiculous.Eventually I kicked the door and it opened.YAAAA!I liked this poem.Thanks for entering!
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I feel like it was very suitable of you to use a limerick-style when writing this poem. Considering that the subject is kinda random and funny, the humorous style helped it a lot. This poem was very cute. You made doorknobs proud! well done!
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This is a great write, both in content, and in structure. The idea is a great one, somewhat humorous on the surface, but with a deep message to appreciate everything we've got and be thankful for them. (Reading the Author notes I can see how you came up with the poem. I've found that unpleasant happenings often provide great poem material later on.)
The rhythm and rhyme was also great. The pattern you used is one of my personal favorites because it is just so easy to read when done well, which you certainly have.
(Just noticed your age which makes it all the more impressive!!)
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you've got to be kidding! it's cute and I can appreciate your passion!
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nicely done. great use of meter, and this seems to have been done in the limerick style if i am not mistaken. good choice.
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I love the poem itwas very well done. And I expect if the doorknobs could talk they would tell us a great deal. Thank you for sharing it was very well done.
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Very good!
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Pretty good piece you have here! Funny and true, we do take things for granted sometimes.
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This is a very cute write! The Ode to Doorknobs...very well done! Brought a smile on my face
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aww... this is so sweet and wonderful! light hearted and humorous, but sincere and true. love this closer look and your care and compassion for something we normally take for granted.
i like the use of internal rhyme as well as end rhyme as well. great rhyme scheme, just really nicely done overall.
i too have been locked in the bathroom because the doorknob came off, except i was at a camp. the bathroom was far removed from the rest of the camp, so even though i pounded on the door with the doorknob and shouted for over an hour, nobody could hear me. (i know, poor doorknob.) it was certainly a memorable experience. hey, at least we didn't get locked out of the bathroom!
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