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Drainage

A ghost came out of my faucet
But he looked like an Angel to me
A skeleton walked right out of my closet
I guess he had no more secrets to keep
It’s funny now this smile on my lips
I shut the door with a crack
And put that smile in your fist
The reaper took a seat beside me
Shook my hand with a twitch
Checked his watch for the time
Then went to set some souls to rest
I think it’s kind of strange
How I just won this bet

Man, these headlights are getting pretty bright
As this highway curves between the lines
Cough it up again inside
Plastered on that bit of grime
The disease is coming out of me
Twisting in my bones so tight
You hold my seams with needles sharp
Now crisscrossed all around my heart
You knew how to piece it together just right
Even when things got dark

You drew a cloud around my head
Put your fingers upon the rain
Hey, hey, you brushed the storm away
Down way down into the drain
Where the ghost appeared again that day
Did you see? Did you see?
I could swear, he looked like an Angel to me…

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Drainage. That pretty much explains it
I want starbucks. I also want a tux. Doesn't mean I get to have it...
WoOoGLE.

Two plums a day keeps the plumber away :)

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  • Ellis gold member
    August 28

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    A cat has nine lives and no ghost
    So this could not have been me
    I am a most welcome host
    For a very, very small fee

    Tiki Cat
    Buy my Tiki's Gourmet Cat Food
    "Too Good For Humans"


  • Chocolate Dime
    September 13, 2008

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    Hey you, you know how I'm all jello about your poems, yeah this just added to that big smelly laundry heap. Like, the first time I read it I didn't really get it then I read it again then I was like "Ooooooohhhh I see" so yeah. I'm so sticking my tongue out at you right now and not in a happy way!! Blahh
    And have a good day


    • Tweedle Dum
      September 14, 2008
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      JELLO! JUMBO!

      SHRIMP! Man I'm sorry cause i hate doing laundry BUT I THANKYOU ALL THE SAME. AS ONE GOOD SAMARITAN TO ANOTHERA. I SHALL GRAB YOUR TONGUE! AND STICK IT TO A CAVEMENS BUTT! HAH!
      I'm watching the wedding singer lmao...He just called this guy a fatty cuz he is sad LOVE STINKS! YEAAAHH YYEAAHHHRR..haha..i love this movie...


  • Bubble-Licious
    September 10, 2008
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    Missed you terribly!

    Interesting, doll. That's mostly what can be said here. I can't lie, I had to read it twice. That's what it took for me to really understand what you where talking about here. But once you interpret it, however it will be interpreted, it is really an insightful and defiant poem. You have taken feared beings and made them seem "normal". Or at least as normal gets.

    Much love, as always,
    Bubbles


  • Tweedle Dee
    July 27, 2008

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    POPEYE THE SAILOR MAN! BEEP BEEP.

    AHAHHAHAA. I BET IT DOES. LMAO YOU AND YOUR POOP. YOUR SCHEMIG POOP. I BET AT NIGHT, YOU TELL IT JUST WHAT TO DO. LMAO [ another rhyme] DUDE! This was absolutely amazing!! Next time when you write something that I can read man [or on the phone] PLEASE BY ALL MEANS PREACH IT TO ME SISTA!! LMAO.

    I know I haven't been the greatest friend about keeping up on this. BUT MY SOARS ARE A FLYING AND OUR HOPES AREN'T DENYIN. we shall survive! AS LONG AS WE KNOW HOW TO LOVE WE WILL ALWAYS STAY ALIVE!!! what do you think about that biatch. oh yes. oh yes i said BIATCH. what are you going to do. that's right.


    GOD I LOVED THIS POEM! I WAS ABSOLITELY AMAZING!! LOVED THE ENDING OMG AND THIS LINE:

    The reaper took a seat beside me
    Shook my hand with a twitch
    Checked his watch for the time
    Then went to set some souls to rest.

    kicked serious buddha butt.

    Love ya man! [AND IM SO GLAD TO BECOMING BACK ON HERE! IT MAKES ME FEEL ALL COZY INSIDE!]

    `The Devil -Dee.


  • Nothing But No
    July 26, 2008
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    You are a brilliant writer. Period.


    • Tweedle Dum
      July 26, 2008
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      WOWZA.

      Thanks!!! That means mucho much too meh! PERIOD. lol.


  • Pisces Pieces
    June 18, 2008

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    I love this, especially the last set...to me it tells a story of someone who is being consumed by a terminal illness, but is fighting it and maybe losing the fight, hence the sighting of Mr. Reaper, although she clearly tells him, sorry buddy but I'm not going yet, nor am I going with you...and he doesn't have time to argue or wait around so he heads out. Sounds like she waits for her angel instead.

    This has a great flow and really does read quite beautifully.

    With your writing, you have to really pay attention when you're reading and that makes it very special. You really should enter some of the poem of the...contests (week, month, year)..your stuff is so unique and original..well, in my opinion

    Awesome piece!

    • Tweedle Dum
      June 18, 2008
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      Hahaha.

      Lol! I thought the same thing in the beginning with the Reaper. And the whole death thing. When I was writing it though, it started out the two lines just popped in my head (as a song) and then im like woosh! The whole time I imagined it as a metaphor for fighting the dark and coming out with an Angel on your side at the end. But the way you took it is also really awesome. Thanks for pointing out the complexity of it lol!
      Thankyou so very much
      AND yes! One of these days I'll go enter a contest. I've actaully been looking at them the past few days...A few caught my eye. I'm just kinda lazy thats all
      Thanks again you are the queen of pisces!!!!! Mwahaha! Mucho lovo!

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