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Questions

Wordless thought

swept oceans of time

aside to reveal

 

what once was I...

           what once was he...

 

he who persisted

where not welcome.

Blackened water of rescue

shamelessly he pursued.

 

Challenged my thoughts

invaded my mind

 

my life...

          my heart...

 

fate parallels

he was

 

my fulcrum...

         my protagonist...

 

sword tipped at throat

love as strong as hate,

yet somehow intertwined

 

melded bodies...

         twisted sheets...

 

change me he did,

so I bid him adieu.

 

Consigned to separate,

yet the questions persist

where they are not welcome.

 

Author notes

The heart is such a strange little monkey. Although I absolutely despise the things he once did. I still miss that son-of-a-bitch!

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  • Piccola gold member
    August 3

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    I did not find this to be ramblings. I've re-read it and find every word to have its place. I think it was well thought out ...
  • nature mithya
    July 23

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    To ramble is fine.

    Without their heart can any poet ramble in freedom.
    Try to write about beautiful things do a short poem with words well placed and roll them in your mind so they resonate in your mind.
    Read the above poem and test for yourself what I say.
    The points are for encouragement. Best of luck.

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  • DenyMyLove
    June 30

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    Very well written!!!! And I understand what you're saying about still missing him. Unfortuantly you don't have to like a person to love them! I recently found that out!
    ~DAWN~

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  • toomysterious
    June 19
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    Wonderfully written. It is so easy to see the internal conflict.


  • And Hyetal
    June 19

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    There's so much emotions poured into this write... The flow of this poem was just perfect. I loved the read.

    ~Cassie


  • whos my humblepie
    June 18

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    you had a monkey?
    well anyways.....I loved this sweet cheeky little piece!

    keep it up poet.


  • Piccola gold member
    June 18
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    the thought of someone being a fulcrum for us is strangely familiar. So is the love/hate relationship. Some day he'll come along; the man you love

  • poeticweaver gold member
    June 18

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    Strange Little Monkey,

    Yes, the heart sure is. I hope one day you'll find someone who gives as good as they get. This way you'll know true love when it can be given, forevermore. Much love and light, Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo

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