In every shattered piece of glass, I see a part of me.
The sparkling shards beautiful even as they mock me.
Every piece shows a weakness within me.
Even the dust grinding into my skin express the state of unrest I've held in.
But even as the glass cuts and makes me bleed I realize.
Never has my anger been so beautiful to me.
Author notes
I've never actually done this, but I imagine this is how I would feel about it.
A contest entry
- Word Prompt 1: Glass by Metaphorist.
600 points, ended June 20, 13 entries
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Hey it would be kool if the last line became the title, kind of a full circle thing.
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Sad piece that I can all too much relate to. Well done! Thanks for entering.
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wow!
this is such a unique piece! i love the way you weaved your emotions into this poem! i have to say, it was perfect! the wording, structure, and imagery! everything was mindblowing... keep writing!
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My thanx
Many thanx, it seemed so simple to me when I was writing this. I think though that maybe it was too simple for the contests I entered... *shrug* what can you do... thank you for the praise and the encouragement!
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The last line of this poem really grabs the reader and leaves a lasting impression. Anger being beautiful...hmmm, that's something to ponder. Well done.
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I think you really hit the mark with this one! You described it so well. Well done and good luck!
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Too kind
You really are too kind, and I totally appreciate it. Glad you liked it, since I get such a kick out of all of yours.
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Wow, its so beautiful, but you can since the pain, and anger, its wonderfully written.
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Appreciated
Well thank you, this is a little out side of my normal write but I've been feeling the need to smash and this was what I imagined I'd feel like.
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Wow! That was beautiful!
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Much appreciated
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You're welcome!
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Wow...for some one who doesn't cut this very eye opening in few lines. A great job Ness.
Though I'll tell you...you could add more...well I see more. 
Good luck! 
~Kystal angel
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Yeah yeah
Well, I don't cut but I've been close. I didn't want to have to clean up blood though. And actually this is closer to the angery breaking of stuff than of self pain. And yeah I wanted to do more, but it wasn't working out like I wanted. I might add more later or start another.
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I really like this. I like how you have used shards of glass to compare your state. Very moving. Good imagery too. I like the last 2 lines, leaving them on their own gives straight impact and i like that.
'But even as the glass cuts and makes me bleed I realize.
Never has my anger been so beautiful to me.' Good luc in our future poems. xx -
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Many thanx
Yeah I saw this contest and just wanted to enter. This is what I saw when I closed my eyes. Thank I appreciate the compliment and look forward to entering more of your contests.
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