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Universal Truth

Missing image

Ethereal cells creating a whole,

Uniting unseen.

Vibrant colors we adorn,

Luminous sheen.

 

 

Battling matter, energetic force,

Need to control.

Endure negative, suppliment positive,

Blossoming soul.

 

 

Evert consciousness, retainment,

Evolution done.

Alpha, Omega is complete

Absolute is one.

 

 

 

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(abstract, rhyme)

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  • Exit-Stage-Right
    August 3, 2008
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    Does not meet 200 word minimum. You don't even have 100... not even 50!!!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    July 8, 2008

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    Excellent composition--well written & versed--
    Worthy of past awards and best of luck in this contest!! :


  • Mila7
    July 7, 2008

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    Great Image! I loved it!

    "Luminous sheen"

    This is perhaps one of the phrases that most jumps out, I like the imagery created by it.

    "Endure negative, suppliment positive,

    Blossoming soul"

    Its the eternal struggle, well done.

    "Alpha, Omega is complete

    Absolute is one."

    Absolute is one... Incredible last verse, its thought provoking.

    I like how you describe it, the rhyme has a very good flow to it. And an extensive vocabulary.

    Great Write!


  • indomitable
    July 5, 2008

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    pretty damn good for a poem that rhymes. it flows well and has a lilting quality i like. this was a really nice one, i enjoyed the power and imagery of it. thank you.


  • Desire gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    Magnificent!!

    Powerful piece You have penned and Love the energy also the images that came from Your words
    Love that rhyme also- tight~
    and the words: Blossoming soul

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Keep that quill dancing~~
    Thank You for sharing Your Voice and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Cr187
    June 22, 2008
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    ....woow.........coooollll, lol

  • Mailservhr
    June 22, 2008
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    "create an image" Woman. Excellen

  • Mailservhr
    June 22, 2008

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    Inspiring

    Thought specifically of the adjectives; and the possibility of my desire existing as a known medium. I have tell you I'm a two guy; but your a finalist.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    Ah..you have painted here the arena of the universal nature....well done..my thanks for such a wise entry in my contest...


  • simpliciti
    June 21, 2008

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    well-done

    wow-such marvelous color BEFORE reading and a great messag that shares MUCH. one applause BEFORE judging,
    to be fair.thanxxx for entering!



  • darrylblacksr
    June 20, 2008

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    Really incredible, I'm at lost of words for this poem which comforts the mind and soul. Thank you so much for sharing it and I wish you the best in the contest...


  • maa gold member
    June 19, 2008
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    this poem is very much my cup of tea ...
    I wouldn't be able to speak about the subject in a better way ...
    this pulls strings, quietens doubts, enhances peace ...

    thank you for having added your precious voice to this inspiring contest ...

    much love,
    maa


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    June 19, 2008

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    Vibrant color filling the soul,
    invigorating, physically
    and spiritually!

    Your work had been so vigorous
    and colorful of late. Great!!!

    Aesthete

  • goalsv
    June 19, 2008
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    What a great poem. Filled with metephors and discription yet holding to the truth. I loved how you ended it.

  • goalsv
    June 19, 2008

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    What a great poem. Filled with metephors and discription yet holding to the truth. I loved how you ended it.


  • ourgirlFriday
    June 19, 2008

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    Wow!

    The background was bold enough, but the poem blew me away! I think you got yourself a real winner here!
    Awesome poem! Please, keep on penning!


  • Providence
    June 18, 2008

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    Ohmigosh! This is simply marvelous.

    It has a whimsical airy feel but its truth is firmly rooted within the soul!

    Just delicious!!

    (Talk about the writings of an old soul!)

    Ovations!

    Marianne


  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    June 18, 2008

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    Hello Poet.

    Very good write. The first stanza; I like the description, heavenly cells that create the whole, and it also could read as a fairly abstract description for the chakras due to their vibrant colours. Luminous sheen to me reads like a description not only of the soul but could also be of the astral body, or indeed some of the other subtle bodies.

    Your second stanza reads like a quick guide or description on how to overcome the physical and flesh/ego self, as one does battle matter, our own and all around us. One certainly needs to go through negatives, for they hold the tough lessons within them, and have positives within them, and finding and learning those lessons, and making subsequent changes allows for the soul to take it’s right full place.

    Third stanza; evert consciouness; to me reads the turning of couscioucness inside out, so what was once just inner is now also outer, as the soul, the real you is ever present. Beginning and end; the circle is complete, and you have gone back to become part of the whole in it’s most amalgamated form. Well that is what I got from your poem. You have said a lot in very few words.

    Thank you for sharing your beliefs, and for taking the time to write and enter this contest. I wish you the best of luck in it. My regards.

    Ace – LightWithinMe.

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