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Drift Away

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~ O Leaf ~
You fell without a sound
From a tired old oak to the snow covered ground.
How long did you suffer; you held with such fright,
Through Storm's wicked fury, did it take all your might.

~ O Leaf ~
Was it hard to watch your colors fade ,
From vibrant green, to rusty crumples of decay.
And what of your plight. And who prepared your heart.
Did you know of Season's end; was it purposed from the start.

~ O Leaf ~
Former friend of shadows where shy petals bloom,
And lovers danced with glowflies

Beneath a vernal moon
Did terror strike as lightning tossing memories on the Wind,
When you fell without a sound ,
Beyond a broken hearts mend.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Copyrights@ls07~Pastel

Author notes

A tribute to my father
who suffered too long before his death.
Group Challenge:'Daily inspirations
Title-'Drift Away'~ by Firequeen
Picture Credit: http://vampirella87.deviantart.com/art/Tree-of-Crows-pt-2-66256172

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  • azlyn gold member
    July 4

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    So beautifully written...

    My dear Sister...such feelings and words you master. A loving tribute I am blessed to have read this day. Blessed poet so fair!

    Love and Peace~
    Az

  • Great stuff!!!

    Beautifully penned!!!
    I love the way you’ve brought this to life & actually made me care about the plight of this poor leaf…
    Magical, visual & emotional…
    Yet another fantastic write (as if I should be surprised)…
    Well done!!!


    • PastelMoons gold member
      June 29

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      Thank you. This is a little different
      for me(different style)
      The title, and thoughts of my father
      brought this to life.
      Again, Thank you!
      I am honored.
  • What a beautiful tribute - all though it was rather sad and haunting, it was so majestic.
    You literally were thinking on the same wavelength as me with this one. I started a poem long, long ago (but never finished or posted it) likening a person's life to a leaf.
    Your version is ten thousand times better than what I even dreamed of. LOL.
    You are an absolutely amazing poet. I enjoy your work so much.
    I know your father must be so proud of you.
    Incredible.


    • PastelMoons gold member
      June 24
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      Thank you!
      I am sure your poem
      is brillant just like you!
      And all of your poems
      for that matter!!!
      Thanks again sweetie
      I look forward to
      your thoughts,
      to your comments.



  • faderman1959 silver member
    June 21
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    This is so metaphorically beautiful! I am speechless! All I can say is wonderful!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 19

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    Wow! Hunni this is stunning! The imagery is superb. A deeply touching poem, so sorry about your dad. I do love what you have done here, using the story of a leaf to portray your thoughts, brilliantly creative, as usual a superbly penned piece that I have echoed upon


  • vici377
    June 18

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    AMAZING..

    WOW..YOU HAVE TOTALLY BLOWN ME AWAY..your imagery is flawless as is your flow..you can picture fall's creeping up on the leaf...and it's turning color to its death..what a poignant write..and the tribute to your dad..is wonderful..am sure he is smiling..thanx so much for sharing..blessings..namaste..


  • ennovy silver member
    June 18

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    I love how you speak of the leaf suffering for so long, fact that it was expected...like a illness or pain no one sees except an angel, because she loves the beauty of nature. You are like that angel loving your father yet know he was like the leaf....sorry for your loss....but a masterful write in tribute to his memory........novy

  • Bob Fox
    June 18
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    Pastel

    Just another masterpiece


  • Firequeen gold member
    June 18

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    wow
    you took the title and did something fabulous with it
    i expected nothing less from you
    this is heart breakingly sad my friend
    Thank you for taking the challenge
    feel free to do more.
    fire


    • PastelMoons gold member
      June 18
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      Thanks hun,
      I have been wanting to write
      something for him, you gave me
      the nudge I needed.
      Love you
      ~Pastel
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