The walls were closing in,
My life was crumbling down,
Everyone else had taking off,
I could barely manage a frown.
Beside me though you always stood,
Your words brought out a smile;
When you could have left me alone,
You went that extra mile.
And then again months later on,
When crushing news I had received;
Once again my friends were gone,
But in me you still believed.
Many times after they died,
I wished that I could go;
You held me close, I had to accept,
That I could not follow.
Through the years passed since then,
You always have stayed close;
In my heart and in my head,
You've haunted like a ghost.
There is no way that I can say,
How much you've meant to me;
Regardless where our future takes us,
In my heart you'll always be.
Author notes
This poem was written for my dear friend Danielle Trahan who was and has been there for me through the hardest times in my life. I love her more than I could ever say. I really have been blesed to ahve her as a friend in my life. This poem was written June 18th 2008.
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this is sweet
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Thanks.
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np
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Thank you for your beautiful entry and best wishes in the judging.
Margaret
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Thanks you
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Oh my, this is such a beautiful poem. You truly are blessed to have such a friend as this, I'm fortunate to have such a sonderful friend too
And, as has been said...I love rhyming poetry, it takes great skill to rhyme well.
Thanks for sharing this,
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I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks for commenting.
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Reading the comments below I have to agree with you.I cannot understand why some people get so hot under the collar about rhyme.It takes skill to rhyme and it is not at all childish.Many great poets rhyme.I am not a lover of Free Verse myself but each to there own.I enjoyed reading your poem for a second time as it speaks so well of friendship and harmony, Ros
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Exactly. I mean the majority of the "greatest poets" worked in rhyme. The essence of poetry is the structure and most freeverse really has no structure.
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Here comes a technicality...
4th stanza - who is holding you close? yourself? or your friend?
If I may, I'll assume you mean your friend and offer a quick mend -
"Holding me close, you helped me accept/ That I could not follow." (or insert "let" or "made" instead of "helped")
Aside from my nit-pick, this is a wonderful piece.
It's sad - a true friend found in the loss of another.
So many of us don't take the time to appreciate the people in our lives until we think it's too late,
but this poem is proof that it's never too late.
Thanks for reminding me of that.
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Thank you for th sudgestion. I need to take a touch that spot up a little bit.
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An exceptional write
From the heart indeed I have never read such a beautiful tribute to a friend so loved .Bravo and to all friends who never gives up on s no matter what
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I've been so fortunate to have had the friends i have had. Thanks you for the comment and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
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lovely words hun, even if they do rhyme
great friend indeed
Tasha
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I'll never understand why people dont like rhyme.
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its not completely that i don't like it, but i think one can be more creative and deviate from aabb or abab rhyme.
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Yeah I see it as taking more skill and creativity to make a good poem that rhymes then a freeverse that really has no limitations at all.
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guess we have to agree to disagree. . . you still have to make free verse flow, i just find aabb or abab rhyme elementary, its how i started writing but i like to think i've grown alot
too each there own, you can't get mad at me for not liking rhyme, when you never even comment on my stuff lol -
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I dont comment on real short poems. I rarely even read them.
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glad we can banter friendly about our difference in opinions
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I enjoy iot as long as both people remain calm. hey i was a debator in highschool.
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you could always go back and read my longer rhymey stuff then . . . if you expect ppl to comment on your stuff you should return the gesture sometimes hun
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I do to the people that read my poems. When people consistantly read and comment on my poemtry I always return the favor.
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yet you expect me to consistantly read yours and always sending links but you have only ever commented on 2 or 3 of mine . . . not quite sharing the experience now are we
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Yes agree to disagree. I was the opposite I learned using freeverse. Its much simpler to write to me and much more common.
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awwwwwwww hun she is really lucky to have a friend like you as am i what she means to you is how you are to me but anyway back to the poem this is really really amazing and sweet i loved it
XxoxX
Rose
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I'm glad you think so highly of me but its really not deserved.
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aww this is really sweet..
You really expressed how much she means to you.
It's great to have wonderful friends like that..
You have such a wonderful heart.
and I'm glad that whenthings got bad you had someone there for you to lean on.. You did a wonderful job hun..
Angel
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She really is a great friend and I owe my life to her.
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Who am i to judge?
For this although primitive in form.
Is your heart.
Your true inner feelings
And that is the best poetry of all!
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Thanks Keith
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A lovely tribute.A special friend for you.Keep her special.True friends are few and far between, Ros
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Yes they are and She is one of my dearest friends. To only call her a special friend would be a slight on mine and hers history.
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Aaawww
This is so cute.
Sweet. I love it.
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If she reads this she will like it much. ITs beautiful. :-]
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I wish she could read this. Maybe I'll call her and read it to her. She would probably enjoy it.
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