lost in life on the road of despair
can't breathe it in because you sucked up the good air
i've seen friends and family killed right before my very eyes
through this i've lost my reason to laugh
you killed my hope in life of ever seeing the silver lining
i've cried and cried
but everyone walked by me like i don't exist
they don't care and i don't think they ever will
i'm alone in this forsaken world
where wrong is right and right is wrong
all that i loved been taken away from me
can anyone hear that?
can you feel?
can you love?
can you feel the joy of laughter with your friends?
or has your heart been formed with ice for so long
you've lost the ability to feel
from where i've stand
no one will look out for me but me
it's hell on earth
my heart's so tender
i've no more tears to shed
Author notes
statement 4: i love walking in the rain, cause then no-ones sees that i'm crying
A contest entry
- Make me feel it by Dovina.
450 points, ended July 1, 2008, 12 entries
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such sadness
I feel the lonliness of walking and crying
Such bittersweet imagery traced with exquisite soft, tragic wording. I can only say I know how that feels- I to often walk alone in the rain crying..
I love this thanks for sharing
RareFlower
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How sad to feel so alone, to feel as if you can't trust anyone. Some days I feel like that, that I am the only one who cares what happens to me. thanks for your entry
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wow!
this brought tears to my eyes! a very touching and heart-felt write i have to say!
amazing work of art here... your emotiosns were raw and powerful! keep penning!
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wow!
this brought tears to my eyes! a very touching and heart-felt write i have to say! amazing work of art here... your emotiosns were raw and powerful! keep penning!
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wow!
this brought tears to my eyes! a very touching and heart-felt write i have to say! amazing work of art here... your emotiosns were raw and powerful! keep penning!
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I really enjoyed this. Made me cry with you. really like it. Shows sucj strong emotion. you hav wrote 'from where i'v stand' and i think it should be stood though but that is probably a typo. i really enjoyed reading this and it makes me want to read more of your work. good luck in future poetry.
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