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Chase

Heavy pupils scream Come hither,
a wry smile wills you to wither,
to crack at lead seams
when all is transparent.

Bare legs strike poses
upon mental anvils, exposing
bells of delight chiming
behind dark eyes.

Scented blushes
send rushes
until he gushes
and pushes
and she
snaps

No.

His heart,
a suicidal breeze block
desperately swims back down stream.




Author notes

My mate, James Bewley came out with the idea that he "swims like a suicidal brezeblock" whilst talking to me this morning, and I was editing an old idea for a poem, when it seemed to fit brilliantly.

Apparently: Gummy bears will soon take over the world - I doubt it, somehow.

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  • Desire gold member
    June 29, 2008
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    Oh My~

    Wonderful piece You have versed but unfortunately this contest
    calls for pre-writes from my previous contests entered
    but I Thank You for taking the time Sorry but I have to remove-
    Best wishes in all You doand much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Missa
    June 29, 2008

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    no its not too cliche. its just right. and about the gummy bears...my friend and i had an inside joke about how we were going to take over the world with the gummy bears as our army. anyway, i loved the poem. very dark.


  • Heartless Angel
    June 24, 2008

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    This is a lovely, lyrical poem. It seems a little dark though. I really wanted something light-hearted for the contest. Great job on it, but i really don't see the joy of being single.


    • maktub
      June 29, 2008
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      when you get tired of being coupled, you see the joy in being single, until you weary of that...it's an endless cycle, where, eventually, you get tired of both, because, eventually, you see the ups and downs of both.


  • individuality gold member
    June 18, 2008

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    there is a lot here that makes me smile - the title to begin with chase - chasingtheday is me - wither - withered is another name of mine from the past - bare legs, not a name but they are bare right now as i sit in the afternoon's madness. a suicidal breeze block - this line just about sums me up


    • ladame
      June 18, 2008
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      Thanks for the witty comment - made me larf a tad

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