Friendship
mutual care
no room for vanity -
we share equally laugh and pain
closeness...
Author notes
Used the traditional form of cinquain, which is quite boring. The 'modern' way gives more room to create a
poetic feel. Why I chose for the traditional...just to try it.
A contest entry
- Cinquain by Yemassee.
554 points, ended June 21, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I think this traditional form is a harder thing to do than seems from looking, i have done a few but always found it difficult to get what this has- a strong message about something important... the best poetry is that which gives something that can make us better... excellent... h
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A Ha! Friendship ...
A traditon that quickly seems to disappear into something more which then ends up as something less! ... but one that you have addressed to perfection in this cinquain! I applaud you and see this as a good contender! I love friends! joy
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I was going to ask why you chose the boring one but you answered it...took the wind from my sails!
I wonder how many good friends are vain? I mean, they put on airs and pretend to be who they are not. I don't think I'm vain...I mean, we all have our moments, that is no big deal, but I mean on the whole.
I like the though behind it, friendship of course is accepting the persons flaws (assuming they aren't major ones...like he's murderer or a Republican
...)
A friend would have to over-look a lot of my...no not flaws...I am classy...I have peccadillo's and small indiscretions...but never flaws!
Sorry, head hurts too much to be too silly. I do like the cinquain, what it says, what it implies, what it reminds.
Thanks Fishy!
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