In my life things were never right,
I lost sight when she came into my life.
she was beautiful.
From then I knew she was the only thing Id ever need.
At first she hurt me,
stung me and burnt me.
I love the sent of her as I
inhaled deeply,
I derailed off the tracts of reality.
She took me to another place, somewhere I felt safe.
I knew by doing this I was becoming a disgrace.
I was so blue, but I knew she would listen,
she doesnt accuse me for being who I am.
One night so sad, I ran to her,
and began to spill my heart.
"One line, I promise you'll be fine."
The feeling creeped
I felt like I was falling asleep.
I was in so deep.
I fell back un able to react,
Distant voices, insisted it was her.
I saw fear along with tears.
I was too high to realize
that I died.
Overdosed on her,
On the moster that I loved the most.
Author notes
Well this poem is referring to the girl "she" which is actually a drug. In the poem it mentions "one more line.." The drug I picked for her to be was Crank.
She was a monster becuase she was the drug, but was looked at like a person to the User.
(the option I chose was Option #3)
Comments
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Hello CursedCorrupted. This is a nice piece, you need to sort out your spelling and punctuation though. Id = I'd. Sent = scent. Un able = unable. Making the drug into a person was a good move, gives the drug a voice, and helps those who don't/haven't taken any drugs to relate to it as a person. My regards.
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The poem was alright, but I'm giving you a warning before I DQ you. Go back and read the rules.
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awesum, luv how you made the drug into a love/girl, very clever, it really made me think,it really struck me at the end realizing that "she" was a drug
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Wow! The fact that you made this out of a drug is amazing, I wouldn't have realized without the Author notes. It's very well done. I love how in the poem you say "I was so blue, but I knew she would listen", and than you use blue font. I'm glad I'm not the only one, people usually laugh when I do this. "I love the sent of her as I", should be "Scent". Great write and good luck in the contest.
Bloody wishes
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