As nature and human compete,
You will find the answer you seek;
All you are part of, under the stars,
Is part of all that you are.
You are the truth that you speak,
And the truth will set you free;
Yet knowledge is not born unconditionally,
And freedom is not always free.
You are who you are, in reality,
Good and evil challenge you by decree;
While the drum continues to beat...
I found the answer I seek;
All I am part of, created by Thee,
Is part of the wholeness of me.
And I know to be free, is not really free;
Choices I make, based on all I perceive,
Define my own self-reality.
Being one with nature is no simple feat,
Good and evil will always challenge me;
My life has a karmic effect from causality,
Because I am the essence of stark reality;
And the drum continues to beat...
Author notes
The featured contest image, "Reverie"
is credited to DigitalBlasphemy:
http://www.digitalblasphemy.com/
Copyright by Ryan Bliss.
A contest entry
- Interconnectedness by Ace - LightWithinMe.
700 points, ended June 29, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments welcome...
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a lot of truth in your poem I really enjoyed the read well done
Cyber Artist
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Great flow.. Nicely done!!
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Thank you for dropping in & thanks for the clappies!!
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WONDERFUL!!!!!
One as they travel throughout life does let the effects of the things around them become a part of who the are. Sadly this is the way it is, it truly takes a special and courageous person not to be affected and changed by their surroundings.'s
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Thank you, Puppydog!!
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This is just simply delicious
bravo
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Thank you, Theresa!!
I'm glad you like my poem. And, I appreciate the kudos!! Take care... 
Peace & Hugs,
xx Cyn xx
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This is fabulous. The rhythm is different in each part, and it reads like a puzzle to me, just like the answers you seek...brilliant, Muse.
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I can agree with what has been portrayed in this poem. There is the realisation of being ‘I, me and myself'; a distant yearning for wholeness. Yes, truth shall set you free - for me, this is the first step; and, for you, it has come to pass, as for those that know the path to its core. Each line a step in thought toward freedom. A beautiful poem. Congrats on the award. Blessings to you. Frans
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nothin that i can say that hasn't been said below...so being "me"and you being "me" it's seems pointless telling you what you allready kmow.....friggin hell i' talkin xxxxxx again lol
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Wow! This poem is amazing! You so deserve your gold! I loved the rhythm and the final line....
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Excellent piece sweet sis!
Congrates on the Gold! THanks for sharing, I always enjoy my visits when I make my way over here to read your sweet soul! Much love and respect! Love bro Timothy
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It is the truth - so well put.
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you have solved the paradox of the dreamer is the dreamed. Good work.
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Ceased to be amazed.
My dear poet Muse,he standard of your work never ceases to amaze me, each piece is as good as the one before.
I particularly liked the third verse. Carry on writing.
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Thank you, Bill...
Your always thoughtful comments are much appreciated. I'll be over your way soon, as I have been on a time crunch with the computer at the library, so I need to run now. Well, thanks again, and take care!! Peace & hugs, xx Cyn
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Life goes on
I like it but not sure that I agree with the underlying idea. We are all one in each other and of each other. The beat goes on as we pass it on and as nothing stops. We are one in this universe and we are evil and good in ourselves. We are our own cancer and our own cure. This makes me consider who we are as a force and for that prompt I am greatful. Nice piece.
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The last stanza was especially stark. Very insightful.
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Thank you for stopping by to read my work...
I appreciate the kudos!! Peace, Cyn xx
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philosophy, religion and reality combined in this masterpiece. I liked"Yet knowledge is not born unconditionally,
And freedom is not always free" sounds like zen. so fond of your poetry sweet friend
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You are the truth that you speak,
And the truth will set you free;
Yet knowledge is not born unconditionally,
And freedom is not always free.
so much truth in just four lines, i love it. great use of imagery throughout it, and the format was great. congrats on the gold!
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Thank you for the kudos!!
I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. 
Thanks for dropping in to read!! Peace always, xx Cyn xx
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THis is so well written beautiful congrats on the gold!!
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Thank you for dropping in...
And thank you for the kudos!!
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I added a feature to your poem, very good write here congrats on the gold.
~ Chelsey
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Thank you, Chelsey!!
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So inspiring
There is so much that is wonderful in this poem, I can't begin to describe it. Thankyou so much
Love, - ' the drum continues to beat'. That noise should wake us up, eventually?
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There's some intense rhyme in this piece. For me, this speaks of the interconnectedness of God, life, and nature. This is beautifully written with many wonderful thoughts. I'd say this was a well deserved gold and a stunning poem.
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To be aware of Nature is to be aware of an invitation
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congrats
you have some really nice ideas in here. You do a nice job of stating, then reversing the words to restate in a different way (for a cool twist)... my only suggestion would be that, when people read a rhyming poem, they naturally look for a pattern, if they don't find one, they get distracted and miss the message. I stubled a bit on finding your distinctive pattern, but with the wisdom in your words, I think a couple of tweeks and you could find it. But, that's only my opinion (take it or leave it), either way, it's a well written piece - thanks - Kevin
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congradualations,
a brilliant peace,
we are the co-creates of the earth
it is all about our choices.
very vibrant write my friend
God bless...
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Thank You!
I am honored (and quite stunned, actually), and reeling in delighted joy that you thought enough of my poem to award 'Drum Beat' the golden chalice! Thank you, thank you, thank you for hosting this fun contest, and I wish you all the best!! Congratulations to all the winners!!! Peace, Cyn
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We really are "the truth we speak" for there is no way to judge who another is except by what comes out of them by act and deed. We are caught between heaven and hell, I think, and we do all face the challenge.
A nice lyrical write. Good luck. ~ Joyce
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a very graceful and harmonious verse offered here in this contest ... profoundness combined with a healthy sense of "not taking ourselves too seriously" ...
many philosophic poets tend to preach or consider themselves accomplished on their path, and their poetry sings of righteousness rather than beauty ...
but you show us that truth springs from humility, and that peace radiates from "I don't know" ...
thank you, my precious friend, for your luminous poetic offering,
maa
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Your poem ...
and astute thoughts awaken a new sense of thought for living and provides reality for those times when we question the sense of it all. I enjoyed reading it and your form was good which made for ease of understanding. Good luck in the contest! joy By the way your chosen image was the icing!
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You have a very thought provoking piece here Rose. To blend with the theme I thought I'd add a C. S. Lewis quote because I see this as a matter of priorities.
Paraphrasing as accurate as my memory serves, "If God is your focus, you get earth thrown in (as part of the deal) - If earth is your focus, you wind up with neither."
Keep up the good work.
Paul
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"My life has a karmic effect from causality,
Because I am the essence of stark reality;
And the drum continues to beat..."
This is great. Very deep and thoughtful and full of wisdom. Excellent!
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Hello Poet.
Very nice write, almost a musical read at times, and I don’t just mean because of the drum, hahaha. Your poem speaks to me of as above as below, which leads to a holographic fractal nature of things. “You are the truth that you speak”, is suggestive of the power that one’s beliefs can have. Very true that the truth will set one free (8:32 King James Bible). As for knowledge, the path to knowledge can at first be a very painful one, and we pay with so many things. Indeed good and evil are but a decision away in every choice faced. Your answers do speak of wholeness and oneness, and I can appreciate that what you perceive does define your reality, be your perception from within or not. But is reality real? Interesting that you mention your own reality, for it does leave the question what of the collective reality you share with others, is that consensus reality then? Not putting you or your beliefs down at all, I am just inquisitive. Being one with nature is certainly difficult. Nicely rounded off with Karma and causality which again states interconnection. I thank you very much for sharing your beliefs with me, and for taking the time to write and enter this contest.
Good luck in this contest, and I wish you well on your journey. My regards.
Ace – LightWithinMe.
Edit: Sorry, I should have said (John 8:32 King James Bible)
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Nice Job Sis,
You really expressed yourself well here within this poetic piece of art.. I like how you have that message going on, with such a poetic flow. Keep up the awesome works, and as always, good reading you as I find the time. Be blessed, always my friend.
-Timothy, your brother, poeticweaver~ :f
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