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my night...

My night is dark
No dogs to bark


my night is scary
no man to marry

my night is filled with terror and fear

of what will become perfectly clear

my night is a haunting place
if you go there run at a fast pace

my night is filled with monsters ghosts and ghouls
if you go there your all just fools

 

my nights wind howls and tears at your ears

it brings to life all peoples worst fears

 

 

My night is my hiding place

where i go to rest my final case

 

 

my night is everything i wanted it to be

 a perfect reflection of its creator..............

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

me...............

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  • SomeGirlYouKnew
    June 18, 2008

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    i think this would be a lot more effective if it was on a black background.
    i liked the subject a lot, and the idea for the poem was original and really interesting.
    however, i think the rhyming didnt do much for the poem here, id love to see how this poem would look unrhymed, or at least if the rhyme scheme was a little more varied than AABBCCDD...
    incredible ending though. nicely done.
    welcome to AP


  • Lucy.
    June 18, 2008
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    A very dark and creative piece! I love the way you've set it out on the page. Welcome to AP!


  • SpiritDarkmaiden
    June 18, 2008

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    Lol I like the ending the best "me...". I love this piece it rhymes yet still makes sense. "If you go there your all just fools", I think it should be "you're". Great write, true creativity.

    Bloody wishes