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lonely girl

as i close my eyes, all the nights that i've cried,

i see your handsome face, next to me...not half way around the sea,

i feel the love in your chocolate eyes

i feel your arms wrap themselves around me



i can feel your hot breath on my check, letting me know everything will be alright,

i can feel you gently kissing my forhead, whispering "i love you,"

i feel you holding me so close, so tight,

i try to reach out to you, to hold you, feeling sad and blue.



i still hear the echoing of your sweet charms,

what is fur doing underneath my hand?

why does your arms, any longer, not feel like arms?

my mind wraps around it with such understanding.



i see it clearly, as i open my eyes,

its only the dog, and i hold back my scream.

for he is curled around me on the bed and i cant help but cry

help me lord..15 months of him so close yet so far away in my dreams

Author notes

my soldier is currenly serving in iraq...14 more months to go...
i believe it was the first week he left...my dog had been following me around the house knowing some how there was something wrong...i left my door open slightly one night without realizing it..and ever since the dog has been sleeping with me..and it comforts me..because for a little while..im no longer alone...

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  • Symphony
    April 28
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    this was heartbreaking, it must have been such a hard time for you

    thanks for entering


  • lindaburns gold member
    November 10, 2008
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    JUDGE:

    Although your poem seems very sincere and full of feeling, I found the lower case I’s distracting and the lack of punctuation made the poem feel uneven to me. I think your poem can easily get by on content in most places and I appreciate your letting me read it.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 7, 2008

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    I know how this feels, sorry you know how it feels too... i know I'm always that lonely girl, who never really finds the right person[s] to be around *sigh*


  • Candyknife gold member
    July 2, 2008

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    thats really sad
    thats a terrible way to wake up im sorry for your pain and longing
    i hope he comes home safe and makes your dreams come true


  • jamiedoring
    June 18, 2008

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    I have a giant dog that keeps an empty bedside warm too.

    I feel so much emotion in these words as I read them...your love and longing are musing for some good stuff. Hang in there girl.

    Great write.

    Jamie


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    June 18, 2008
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    awww missin him


  • peridotPixi
    June 18, 2008
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    forgot these


    • camo.egg.army.gurl
      June 18, 2008
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      seriously though..earlier..i was not like asleep asleep..but you know when your kinda not quite out out? well my dog had gotten into my bed when i wasnt paying attention..and somehow i had gotten inside of his limbs? so i had them on both sides of me..so when i started to dream it felt like i really had arms around me... then he started to lick my face...that was when i woke up stupid dog loves me too much...its like he knows when i need some loving

  • peridotPixi
    June 18, 2008

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    this is wonderful, i love how you have made this into a bit of humor, its cute, keep your head high, sometimes that dog is enough to help you pull through, keep up the writing, ~Amy

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