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Avoiding Beauty

I once knew a girl who looked like an angel
Soft curves and bouncy curls.
I've never seen such an innocent face
I never thought she could break

But he's taken from her the shine in her eyes.
The bounce in each of her steps.
I've never watched someone die
But I'm pretty sure it looks something like this.

Yeah..

Avoid the angel, she's broken and bruised
You can hear her heartbreak with every step
She clad in black eyeliner and a disposition for life
So, avoid the angel, she'll only make you cry

(They found her on his bedroom floor
They found her covered in blood)

I once knew a girl who look like an angel
And just as sweet, we thought she was a saint
Now, he hangs her halo on his bedpost
Getting a sick sort of pleasure from having broke this child.

It's all gone to hell now, you can see it in her eyes.
She's not really living now, just death warmed over
It's not really her now, her soul has long since past
She's already dead now, why not just let her go

But you can't...

Avoid the angel, she'll always be broken, always bruised
You can hear her heart (break away) with every step
She's clad in black skirts and despite for this life
Now, avoid the angel, she always makes you cry

(They found her hanging from her ceiling
They found her above a pool of tears)

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  • RazorbladeKiss14
    September 13

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    I loved this! It was so creative and very sad! I like it! good job! Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!!


  • lucytarbender
    November 21, 2008

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    Wow

    Ouch...this one hurt to read....

    It was ugly and beautiful at the same time to me. Also very, very true.

  • jadeangyal
    November 11, 2008

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    "Now, he hangs her halo on his bedpost." This was an amazing metaphor. What a very sad poem. It almost sounds like a song, with the repetition of "Avoid the Angel." Maybe more like a poetry reading with background music as a desolate scene is laid before your eyes.


  • FallenFromGrace1102
    September 30, 2008
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    Beautiful Write i loved this. It hit me where it hurts i guess you can say. i wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering this piece. I really liked the lines:

    "But he's taken from her the shine in her eyes.
    The bounce in each of her steps.
    I've never watched someone die
    But I'm pretty sure it looks something like this."

    *~*bee*~*


  • Yunalonei
    August 22, 2008

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    Breathtaking

    This piece was incredible, t brought such a rush of emotion as i read it that i almost cried (which has never happened to me before).
    I love the repetitive line "Avoid the angel...." It gave a strong skeleton to a piece which has no rhyme.
    On the subject of rhyme i'm glad you didnt try to put a rhyme scheme to this piece because i strongly believe if you had it would have completely ruined it.
    I loved this piece in every way.
    Good luck
    xoxo


  • Exodus gold member
    July 3, 2008

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    This was interesting. I do have to say that the contrast between the font and the background was a little painful but other than that I could see this being a great song.

    Thank you

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