Old days gone by
become heart shaped memories that line my mind's barriers.
Past conversations with laughter,
become but faded shadows-
when held in comparison to your anger.
Lazy clouds floating away,
drop slivers of remembrance upon my sheild.
Kisses and cuddles,
Intimacy and affection,
All in which my memory no longer can account for.
Past lies come to play,
While the happiness seems unwilling to participate.
This shattered angel,
once longed to reunite with her demon.
Present day truth seems to contradict the past.
I am no longer the shattered angel,
While you are no longer the controlling demon.
We are but two beings,
Never meant to be.
Author notes
Brief explanation of theme:
This is written in regards to my ex boyfriend (first love) in which it is basically explaining that I remember the bad, over the good. (perhaps because the bad outweighed the good?)
It is explaining at the end of how we are both different people than who we used to be when we were together. (we have not been with or seen eachother for over 2 years)
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Comments
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Beautiful! I loved your use of figures of speech it helped create such a powerful and emotive write! You did a wonderful job conveying your thoughts and emotions to the reader!
One spelling error: "sheild" should be "shield".
Thanks!
~Angi
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sigh...this makes so much sense. it makes me remember everything crappy in my first love too... great write!
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Fantastic read!
I think I will be checking out your work on a regular basis from now on hehe. Your words are so captivating I find myself wanting more with every read.
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Very well done!!!! I know this feeling all too well. You've managed to portray those feelings into words!!!!
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Excellent write here
I found this to feel very truthful and has a lot f depth in the past years of your life . I am so glad you have moved forward to a better life and a happier suroundings
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I don't know that the notes were nescessary here. It was very obvious what this was written about to me. It was well written with good word choice. Thanks for sharing
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Ah..you are revealing the bitter truths of life..and this is indeed a nature of this life..we all are relating this tone my friend...
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thats was a really deep write and i loved it! lol , good flow with shade alos. hope to see more soon!
Matt
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Wonderful poem. Really impressive. A really thought provoking and inspiring write, well worth the read. Thanks for posting, and keep on penning.
Elle.
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