Beside the rustic harbor stands a lighthouse on a hill
It keeps a watchful vigil o’er the waters deep and still
At night the harbor waters shine almost as bright as day
And nothing is as beautiful as moonlight on the bay
The shores stretch out their golden arms along the rugged land
The waters seem to sing and dance across the golden sand
A cool and salty ocean breeze blows softly through my hair
As tiny sparkling water droplets gently fill the air
I stand next to the water's edge and listen while it sings
The water seems to know the gentle comfort that it brings
I long to have you at my side beside the shining sea
While list'ning as the water brings your image back to me
Though we are very far apart I still can see your smiles
As the water whispers soft and sweet across the many miles
I hear your sparkling laughter and it softly seems to say
“I love you”, and it fills my heart like moonlight on the bay
Author notes
Category #3
Commented on "Dancing on MoonBeams"
Written December 27th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- 3 catagories! 3 poem limit! Prewrites accepted! by Candice Bezanson.
1200 points, ended November 18, 99 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest - Prewritten Poems of Perfection by Michael-B.
750 points, ended November 26, 111 entries
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What did you think
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I love this, the imagery of it is amazing... i love water myself, it has such a calm effect and i do all my best thinking by the sea! Very well written, great flow.
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This is a good poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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First off this was a very wonderful background you used. I liked it. This piece you have written was full of emotions. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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sigh ... I can only say this is overwhelmingly beautiful. There are many great poems in this contest and I must say it is probably the most enjoyable contest I've hosted.
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Great write
Good luck.
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Full of emotions! bravo.
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This was beautifully written. The emotions were well done and the imagery was fantastic. BRAVO! WOW! good luck in the contest.
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I love scenic poems, It is really beautiful and gives the emotions a home almost. Thank you for entering.
Kindest of regards
Sophie
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A very beautiful poem...lovely imagery.
Great rhyme and flow.
I'm surprised you haven't received an award for this.
Very well done.
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comparison to mooonlight on the bay beautiful
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thank you for enteirng and good luck in the contest
"The shores stretch out their golden arms along the rugged land
The waters seem to sing and dance across the golden sand
A cool and salty ocean breeze blows softly through my hair
As tiny sparkling water droplets gently fill the air
I stand next to the water's edge and listen while it sings
The water seems to know the gentle comfort that it brings
I long to have you at my side beside the shining sea
While list'ning as the water brings your image back to me"
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This is very good and very well written! Good job and keep it up! Thanks for the entry! Good luck.
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awww this one seems kind of bitter sweet but none the less very beautifuly written and a touch of wonder and hope goes along way in ones heart. Thank you for sharing all of these wonderful poems with me. It has been such a pleasure reading you my friend.
huggles
Lena
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Excellent
Form and content. But, lets toss that aside as I'm not one for either. What I approve most of is the emotion of the poem. That clearly shines upon the water. Even if you don't carry the day in structure, which you do, you would still bring the message in your heartfelt descriptions. Nicely Done. -
You write beautifully. I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing, good luck in my contest
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so beautiful I think that this was such an uplifting poem the ending was wonderful
The Positives:
A great poem I loved this and it really spoke to me
The Negatives:
Nothing that I see great job
My Favorite Part:
I stand next to the water's edge and listen while it sings
The water seems to know the gentle comfort that it brings
I long to have you at my side beside the shining sea
While list'ning as the water brings your image back to me
that was wonderful
Overall:
I give this an 7/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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WOW
This is amazing and so very beautiful.
Excellent rhyme, wonderful flow, lovely language.
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This has a beautiful, and peaceful flow. I love the words and the imagery here.
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What a beautiful, uplifting poem with such a compelling ending! Thank you for sharing.
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Wonderful, I love the nature of your poem. This is so beautiful. Its like I can picture myself in your poem. Very much a pleasure to read.
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You had me in tears. I grew up on the Delaware Bay, near the Cape Lighthouse. I spent so many days playing in the sun on that bay, and so many years as a teenager and young adult walking along it's shores at night, crying from a newly broken heart. This work brought back so many memories and I miss the beauty of the water so much. I live by lake Erie now, but it's not the same for me. I miss the ebb and flow of the bay, its sights, smells, and sounds. This was just beautiful.
***Rae***
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Oh so lovely! thanks for entering my contest!
Love, Raneika
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whoa! thisis so romantic and well styled for this contest, it shines so nicely with passionate romance, thank you for this entry
good luck
mm
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Beautiful and lonely. The rhythm and length of this poem are perfect, and it's highly descriptive and very beautiful. Thank you for entering this in my contest
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This a really beautiful poem. I loved the descriptiveness. I especially love the background picture. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest
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Absolutely Beautiful
What a lovely poem!
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Your descriptions are lovley, Steve, and I find myself calling the images of moonlight on the bay into my vision. (I live very near the ocean.) Romance and magic are caught in that place where memories echo vibrantly across the waters. So I smile at the ending lines of your poem, thinking how real this is...
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Brilliant write. Great imagery too. Thanks for entering
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Another beautiful poem
Oh my! You've described my home by the bay so well. I could see it all! And then you finish by applying that beautiful image to a yearning for someone very special. Yes I agree with the comment that said you could sing a happy tune to the words of this poem. Brilliant!
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Aww wow this was SO so beautiful. Gorgeous imagery & wonderful thoughts. I just loved this! Your rhyme and flow was perfect. Amazing write
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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This is a beautiful and very soothing write. Your wonderful imagery brings the reader right into the peaceful scene. Thanks so much for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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lol..i can see why she will love it...i'm already sighing and humming w/ pleasure just reading it myself..wonderful..i love the title..and while the rhyme is wonderful..the flow of this piece is just print worthy..lovely write..
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a lovely poem this is...just as a rhyming poem should be...it sings
Mal
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Beautiful write!! The rhyming and rhythm are spot on, and the imagery is amazing. (Love the background too.) The poem reminded me of some paintings by Thomas Kinkaide for the feeling it inspires, the soft ocean rhythm, the internal peace, and the touch of longing. Beautiful poem!!
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Absolutely beautiful in every way, impeccably rhymed! flowing as easily as a gentle tide, really nice with the background....
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Fantastic!!
Thanks for entering this again still one of my favorites lol well the last i read was awesome too you are very talented
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Well, this was certainly relaxing to read... it made me think of the beach at sunset. You give a lot of emotion through words... very nice. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Stunnin!!!!
This is absolutely beautiful the flow is flawless and pretty much the same through out. It almost seems like it is written in some sort Of form but I am not to keen on those yet. Sorry . Gonna Book mark this one if you don't mind. May help me get some meter in mine someday. Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
RedwingSpirit
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Oh I definitely understand why this poem is so popular. It's really good. I love the imagery and the thoughts and emotions. It's just so beautiful and full of love. I especially love the ending stanza, and the reference to the title. Good closure, definitely! Loved it!
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Absolutely charming. A very well thought out rhyme scheme that adheres to metre all the way through.
I could almost feel the salt breeze blowing.
Thank you so much for your entry.
~Elora~
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Ahhhhh....First time reading...The flow, the mood, the rhyme, is just beautiful..You seem to be a seal with your love for the sea, and romance here, so akin to the sea.What a lovely love poem...I love your writes....keep it up, never stop with that pen!
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This is a beautifully romantic poem which I think creates a very serene scene of a standing on the shoreline in nostalgic thought. I really like the idea of the shores stretching out their golden arms as if encompassing the person in warmth while the wait for the one they love to return. The sea is an image that can be used so well to accompany love and romance poetry and I think you have used it with great satisfaction in this poem.
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Excellent
Man Steve, I have to give it to you, you breathe freshness into the classical style of poetry with cool contemporary twist. You would be an excellent lyricist. I mean really way ahead of the shit I hear today.
This could be a hit song.
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Beautiful, this is... you have created a beautiful image in this piece
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
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This was another beautiful poem. It all came together so very nicely.
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This is beautiful. Filled with visuals too and the rhyme was just great as was the background art you used. Thank you for this fine entry.
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Beautifully written!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This was just beautiful!!!! I love it all the way through! Your word choices paint a vivid picture of the bay with the water at night reflecting a beautiful full moon, as they gently ebb and flow towards the land. But at the same time the almost haunting loneliness for the one you love looms over casting somewhat of a shadow over the beauty as though it cannot be fully enjoyed. I hope your love returns to you soon so you both may enjoy the beauty that you have so eloquently written of here in this piece!!! Thanks for sharing your heart with us!!!~~Toni~~
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wow, great poem. it is very simple yet there is something very beautiful about it. it was brillant how you made the comparison between the bay and love. very nice.
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Oh how easy it is to fall in love with the ocean...at least in my case haha! I loved the choice of words in this, they went well with eichother! take car
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I've felt the same thing standing by ocean at dark, there's something about beauty making you wish for what you love. This was an excellant poem, it almost felt like being on vacation.
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Pure Love
and sweetness. I love rhyme and love poetry and you brought both of them to this poem. Thanks Great Job!!!
Thanks!!!
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Outstanding!
This is Poetry at its very best!...it simply does not get any better than this!
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So many love poems on this site. And just as many dark. Hardly anything in between. Choose one side, or the other, hardly any of the grey can be seen for the white and black take over and drown out the sibling. Just a little thing I've noticed over the past few days.
Nice little read here, I must say. Reminded me of the beginning of the game Kingdom Hearts, actually. By the sea, in the sand, listening to the waters whisper to you, the one you love gone, but their words coming back to you as they say your name. Beautiful.
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. I like a poem that makes sense to me and I especially like the ones that rhyme. As the saying goes, I'm no artist but I know what I like.
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Beautifully writte, excellent meter and rhyme. Such a romantic, loving write this is. Well penned!
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
Note: Due to high volume of entries, I'll be using a scoring system to judge after the contest closes.
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A deligthful poem with beautiful flow and tender words, moonlight on the bay i like that a lot ,good luck in the contest
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this is very interresting. thanks for enterring my contest and sharing such a lovely poem with us.
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Magnificent!!
Congratulations on Your trophy~
-sees the shelf so heavy the u-haul truck is parked outside-
I should have looked for Your name~ save myself the trouble
of entering
Beautiful tale You have weaved!
Magnificent Masterpiece~again...
Keep that ink flowing my Friend!
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Loved this poem - presentation and writing. Congratulations on winning bronze in this contest. Some great poems entered here.
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Thank you so much for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I loved this poem, the rhymn scheme wasn't forced at all and the imagery this bought to mind was simply poetic. The background went so well with this poem that it looked simply made for it, making the whole thing come together in one huge choreographed dance of talent. I liked it and hope you keep on writing. Great job and good luck.
Tiphanie -
Outstanding
This is the best poem I have read on this webside so far - amazing work and the photograph just gave it that edge - you are a worthy winner -
This is such a beautiful poem.
I could picture everything in my mind. I love anything dealing with the ocean. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!
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EXCELLENT Work on this piece
i only dreamed that i could
write poetry this great keep writing into the future -
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Wow. There's nothing I can say that hasn't already been said...I'm extremely impressed. This is fantastic, and I do wish that I'd written it. Thank you so much for sharing. -
Great
Totaly beautiful!
Such descriptivness, it's like I'm right there strolling the sand bar.. on a moon lit night.
I wish you the best in this contest, this poem is truley note worthy! The rhyme.. I'm not a rhymer, but I can really apreaciate it if it's well done, and this is a very well done rhyming poem. Nothing forced, it all flows well.. I love it! -
Bravo!
Very, very nicely done, indeed! Quite wonderful! Bravo! -
Yes - I wish I had written this.... You deserve a win here!!
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How very very beautiful this is! Sigh...you make ME wish as though I had written this! A most wonderful sharing! Thank you for doing so and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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great
beautiful. poetic. visualy stimulating. absolutely romantic in notion. thanks for sharing your incredible talent. i liked the picture very much. i thought it added a certain element of mystic beauty to the overall tone of the piece. i hope you continue to express your artistic talent in a way that is as awesome and powerful as this. please share more. best of wishes to you and all that you do. happy new year. i hope that all your dreams come true. god bless and keep you. peace always in all ways. -
Wonderful, amazing right, keep up the good work. I LOVED LOVED LOVED it, I loook froward to reading more of your work, it showed so much wonderful emotion!
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What a brilliant background - awesome. Fits so well with the lovely poem of love, about the water being a connection between you and your love.
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very-beautiful-i-am-sorry-about-the-dashes-my-spacebar-isnt-working.this
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over the top
I am not worthy, I haven't the words to explain my thoughts/emotions right now for my eyes are flooded
Bless you, Thank you,
Don
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BEAUTIFUL! Honestly...just amazing! You are SO talented, and your imagery is almost as gorgeous as the background on this page! Fantastic work!!
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That is so beautiful and scenic. Awww so sweet love is but I feel sometimes people over write it but this is nice and quite unique. Write on.
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wow this is beautiful! i mean amazing! i can picture the whole scene! this is extreemily good you have lots of talent well done"
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BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN
Sigh ... This truly a very beautiful poem ... Timeless in its content, timeless in its rendition. I cannot emphasis how much I enjoyed reading this nor the comforting feelings that it invoked.
Best wishes for the contest,
Take care,
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very good
wow ! very impressive great write you done exceelent work and on top of that good picture to go with your work too very impressive !
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Wow. This is a very beautiful write. The description of the bay was well done and I could easily envision it throughout. Best of luck in the contest. ~Jim
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This was very moving and i like the image! Great job on this,you are trully a romantic!
Good luck in the contest.
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ooh i loved this. The flow was amazing and it had me going the entire time. Nicely painted image it gave too GREAT JOB!
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amazing
wow. this was a really deep poem. i was really into it as if i was there. not many poems do that to me. not many writers have that talent. especially me. i hope that u do well in the contest. i can only hope that u win -
'At night the harbor waters shine almost as bright as day
And nothing is as beautiful as moonlight on the bay'
The only thing more beautiful is this exquisite work of art.
This is gloriously beautiful, and flows as smoothly as the harbor waters of which you speak. The imagery is haunting, and I love the chills that went up my spine as I read the last stanza. You are an amazing writer, and I deeply love this write.
Thank you so much for sharing your beauty with us.
Blessed Be,
~Sherry~
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very good and clear, paints an image
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Sensual!
A joy to the senses. I love rythmic poetry and this one ebbs like the ocean it describes. I was sat by the sea just then, smelling the salt and thinking of myspecial person. I wouldn't worry about the contraction because it was good to start the rythm off and keep it going. The best thing I've read in a long time. -
gorgeous poem, i like it good luck in the contest
love em
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Very heart-felt. The romantic in you shines through.
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I LOVE THIS POEM!!! My biggest problem with poems that rhyme is that the author often uses very bland words just for the sake of making the poem rhyme. I find myself doing it sometimes, and it drives me crazy. However, I love to read a poem that not only rhymes, but is also very well written... Props to you!
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5 stars
Wonderful! You did an awesome job with this piece. Very good. You were one of my finalists in my contest and I wanted to write a comment on such beautiful work. I imagined this place so perfectly based on your beautiful words. A very good piece of work, and thank you for entering it. It was a joy to read. -
thanks for entering the contest.
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This is so gorgeous. I humbly bow. Your words are so gentle and heartfelt. I feel silly for having entered this contest.
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Very beautiful! I liked the rhyme as well, it wasn't forced at all. Wonderful imagery too. Great write.
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Oh, this is very good. The sea and the myths, the stories and the sagas of her. Great write!
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I have always loved this background for it's versatility in fiiting many different situations. You have used it wisely here because it certainly fits the scene that plays through my mind as I read your words here. The tranquility that your words inspire is beyond anything that any manufactued drug could possible deliver. Thank you for such a pleasurable read. Good luck in the contest.
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Now this is poetry at it's best. It transported me to those youthful days wandering along the shore. I felt again the sea breeze, the taste of spray upon my lips, warm sand beneath my feet and the presence of someone from long ago with whom I shared all this. Thank you
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Absolutely beautiful. I appreciate it more being a fan of lighthouses and having grown up on the coast. Great background as well.
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excellent
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Wow. That was deeply touching! The best poem really won!
You were very smooth and the rhyming scheme was excellent and not at all forced.
I am almost tearful..it was almost like reading Housman...
Princess
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