Adrenaline pumping,
hands begin to shake,
heart pounding, thumpthumpthumping...
all my senses so suddenly awake.
You
slowly
but surely
made your move,
dug in the claws,
claimed your win
while we dealt with the loss.
But hey,
you can have him
for what it is worth-
he's just good enough for you.
But me,
well, I know I deserve better.
To each their own.
You don't see me throwing stones
about your two bastard kids,
with your two baby daddies-
one in jail,
one who just don't give a fuck-
and now my leftovers.
Please!
You can't possibly wonder
why your girl, at 14,
gets stoned out of her mind
and piss ass drunk.
I guess there is
no wondering where you went wrong,
when, obviously,
you never really got it right.
Even now,
still,
he's a married man
who will never marry you
yet the best you can do.
Take this as you will,
advice, a warning, or a threat.
If you really think I am a bitch
girl, you ain't seen nothing yet.
I've kept my mouth closed
as the storm constantly blows
but I am one word away
from anger you've not yet known
because my little girl sits crying
she heard your sorry ass lying
you knew she was there
as you trash talked liked she wasn't.
I'm really getting pissed
and am about to settle this shit-
When it comes to my husband,
you can have the sloppy seconds.
When it comes to me
Say whatever you want that helps you get by,
I know the difference between his truth and lies.
But.
Fury feverly festers under the surface.
I place it on the back burner,
keep pushing it aside. Heat anything
long enough and it will come to
a boil, and might even make it's
way to uncontrollable.
Let's set it straight here
whenever my kids are near
you should proceed with fear
and if ever I hear
you harm even a thought
in their happy little minds,
Well, I will be inclined
to let my anger unwind
on you.
I am their mother,
don't ever forget.
Doing them wrong
will be your last regret.
I'll take you down
and rip you to shreds,
powering punishment
with every word left unsaid.
So do us both a favor
and kindly learn your place
before everything backfires
right up in your face.
Don't
make me
unleash my crazy...
Author notes
There is only so much inner strength one can possess...
Option 2.)I want a very angry, bitchy, vengeful write. To anyone. Especially a lost/past lover.
I know this is longer than 70 lines, but they are short, and this is what I consider my personal best...
In a list
A contest entry
- I'm a Bitch, I'm a Lover? by Poetic Obscenity.
1000 points, ended July 6, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Personal Best: contemporary poems. by Brit-Girl.
700 points, ended August 12, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Let Loose Your Anger by poets whisper.
650 points, ended November 28, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I'll take you down
and rip you to shreds,
powering punishment
with every word left unsaid.
That right there spoke volumes to me. You commented once upon a poem I wrote, and sent me to read this. I fear I've delayed far too long in this and I wanted to say that your anger, your rage, serves a purpose.
It keeps you focused, keeps you right where you need to be in order to protect your children.
I applaud you!
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you can always combine lines to make them shorter (not that I care) you certainly let the anger flow like lava here. good job with that.
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i like the onomatopoeia at the start
and though this is longer than the line limit
i'll let it slide because i like the poem and you let me know in your notes
thank you for your entry!!
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Wowww. Incredible ! I loved the rage and anger throughout this poem. The whole attitude is just amazing, and everything about this piece was pure brilliant ! I can sense the definite frustration and hate in this. Amazinggg. Thank you so much for the entry & best of luck to you !! Keep writing, because you've got the talent ! ♥
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Fury feverly festers under the surface.
Place it on the back burner,
keep pushing it aside. Heat anything
long enough and it will come to
a boil, and might even make it's
way to uncontrollable.
I LOVE THAT. There's only so much one can take before you BREAK.
And "Don't make me unleash my crazy" - wow, I love it. Lovelovelovelove LOVE it.
You TELL HER! -
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This is by far my favorite in this contest. I'd like to first, welcome you to the finalists list. You're an amazing writer with great talent. Wonderful metaphors. Great flow. Rhyming wasn't forced. && Yet your fury definitly provoked feeling within me.
I'm ever so sorry to hear that this happened to you but i'm ever so glad it inspired such an amazing piece. You're great!
Thank you ever so much for your entry and Goodluck. -
Fury festers under the surface.
I place it on the back burner,
and push it aside. Heat anything
long enough and it will come to
a boil, and might make it's
way to uncontrollable....
i am in love with this piece... but i am more in love with that verse up above...
WOW! UNLEASH COS YOU DESERVE IT!!!!!!... and if you choose not to... thats cool too... love ya sis!!!!
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You go girl ... give her some whoop ass!!!
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