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hurry back...

 

 

 

 

 

i watched you walk away
i told you "see you later" instead of "goodbye"
goodbye you will never hear me say
when you return i wont have an allabi

i wont be with someone else do not worry

i love you with all my heart   

 

 

 

 

 

i will be here patiently waiting for you

just make sure you come back

15 months without you i feel so blue

make sure you return from IRAQ

come back to me in a double hurry

i hate that we are a world apart

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

my boyfriend just went to iraq...

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  • Symphony
    February 22, 2009
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    This must be so hard for you, having him living and working in a whole other world - and worrying constantly about the danger that he is in ;

    poems like this i always hate critiquing because i think they can be so much of a part of a person, however if you would specifically like a critique, please do let me know and i will return to do so.

    thanks for entering


  • peridotPixi
    June 18, 2008

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    i hate being a world apart too, he will return ♥ "the best part of waiting, is having someone worth waiting for" keep up the wonderful writing ~Amy


  • SilverWolf
    June 17, 2008

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    AWESOME WRITE GIRL!!!

  • AdulteratingDeploy
    June 17, 2008
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    Aww.


  • Hateful Apathy
    June 17, 2008

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    ...I am wondering. Why in all of your poems you capitalize all of the word "Iraq"?

    Good write though.

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