a tourniquet around my heart
each beat pumps the poison I need
to feel; such an addictive pain
you are my drug there is no escape...
....I'm hooked on you.
Author notes
Picture Prompt - +JunkY+ by ~Momochan666 on Deviantart.com
http://momochan666.deviantart.com/art/JunkY-49308853
A contest entry
- Quickie 2 by SuicidalLover.
450 points, ended June 21, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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is was so short but while put together but why so short you should have kept going good work
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It was so short because there was a word limit. It could only be 30 words no more no less. Appreciate you reading.
~sugar~
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Deep
Very passionate & powerful write, sis. Real good.
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Thanks for reading bro
Appreciate you
~sugar~
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So few words beautifully written
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Creative take!
I expected the sappy, romantic teenage angst of love. What I got is a little of my own medicine. This is a dark, little piece that is risk taking. Good luck, Michelle.
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Thank you Greg, is there still enough room for little ole me? I'm not taking up to much of your space?
Always a pleasure, valued and appreciated.
Luv ~sweetness~ xx
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A different take on this image. I really like this poem, as you are getting away from drugs, and focusing on that disallowed word, "love". I have read many of your comments on Swtpoetryman's poems. though I might peek at your own poems. So creative and metaphoric when it comes to love. Best wishes in this contest!
Linda
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Thank you for your fab comment
That was it exactly that disallowed word 'love'
Swtpoetryman is me best mate he is wicked fun
~sugar~
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True poetic description of how love can be addictive when it cceases to become a want and proceds to become a need
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Cheers MJ
So true and the pain that addiction causes
~sugar~
When is your party MJ?
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a tdelightful find
very powerful pen. awsomely written
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Thank you for reading and commenting
truly appreciated
~sugar~
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Addiction, pain, deep affliction. All these feelings came out in this great write hun. The imagery set it off completely. This was dark and powerful too. Just goes to show the negative side of addictive love.
Brilliantly-written. And, good luck in the contest hun.
Dark
Love
Always
Wayne Leon
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You got it to a T sweetie
Thank you for your fab comment hon
You have to have the negative to appreciate the positive.
Truly appreciated
With Dark Love Always
~sugar~xxx
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Amazing poem hun
What fantastic words what really express hooked on you..
addictive indeed
Good luck
Julie
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Thanks hon for reading
Always appreciated
~sugar~
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