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what I want

Kiss me with that passion you once had
Enclose me in your strong arms
Make your love for me obvious
Present me with your true self
Reach into my darkest places
Fears subsided as you protect me
Shield me from pain and heart break
Hear my every word, every "I love you"
Never abandoning me
Touch me softly in the night

A contest entry

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  • lost-on-the-inside
    August 3, 2008

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    this is an is great. the part "never abandoning me" shows you don't want to be alone and that you can trust this person. once again well done and thank you!!!!!!!!!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    Dreams of an everyday housewife

    Often we find ourself dancing alone for the times we ask they tell us no . Hearts on hold where love feels like its hanging by a thread we cry


  • honorable mention
    June 25, 2008
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    As you wish.


  • peridotPixi
    June 18, 2008

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    This poem is cute, i love the deep feelings you have packed into this write, i love the softness and the heartfelt words you have spoken, not just a cheesey love poem, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy


  • XNevermindX
    June 18, 2008
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    Hmmm, i like it, sweet and short like always, but with such passion and love, i love it!


  • CharcoalScreams
    June 18, 2008
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    Well done hun and good luck in the contest!
    Much love,
    Sammie xXx


  • lianna27
    June 17, 2008
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    good luck i like it

  • peridotPixi
    June 17, 2008
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    K E M P R F S H N T

    Have fun

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