You've damaged me
My heart
It races
(As you enter the room)
Fluttery insects fill my abdomen.
Pores allow sweat to escape my fingertips
And gravity lets each sweat bead
Drop
To
The
Floor.
My eyes
They stare
Burning into your pupils
And the gorgeous chestnut color that surrounds them.
(You walk closer)
My legs
They've suddenly weakened
Yet my knees have buckled
So I stand there
Awkward and rigid
Unable to move from fear of tumbling to the tile floor.
My face now contains
A scarlet undertone
Emphasized in my cheek bones
And temperature seems to increase
(You're still approaching at an untimely rate)
My inner core burns.
My lungs seem to have shut down entirely.
And I feel myself trying not to choke
On gathered saliva
Nor let it out of my mouth
And roll down my chin in a primitive manner.
(You're getting nearer and nearer)
The follicles on the back of my neck
Seem to have a disturbance
Because the hair inside of them is standing up.
The only part of me that isn't burning
is my spine
Which is being hit with rapid chills
Causing me to shiver
Yet at the same time
My hands lose precious bodily fluids at a constant rate
(You're only a few steps away)
By chance,
Or by miracle,
My throat remembers how to swallow,
My jellied legs have been replaced with irons bars.
My heart rate ends it's marathon
And returns to a normal pace.
My spine has warmed
And body has cooled.
You walk in front of me nonchalantly,
Then stops,
Looks me in the eyes,
Says, "Hey,"
And saunters off.
With that said,
My lungs decide to work again,
The butterflies continue to soar
Almost lifting me off the ground
The natural caramel color of my face is back
And the best part of my day is complete.
Author notes
I decided to write this from a more scientific point of view, and how the body is responding to him (We were studying biology in class...) as he gets closer and what I'm thinking and feeling and all that good stuff. I don't actually like him anymore though, this was written back when I did like him.
So...how did I do?
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Very, scientific. So detailed. It's like your body's reactions written with such detail and creativity. Young love. Ha ha, had to say that.
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Thank you! I wanted to get like, every single detail precise to the point where you can imagine exactly what's happening. And lol,young LIKE, thank you!
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Wow this really shows how most teenagers feel when they have a crush on someone! It really was good! i liked and can't wait to read more!
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Aw! Thank you and trust me EVERY WORD OF IT was utter inspiration from what I felt and I just had to write it all down. Thank so much fro reading and commenting
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wow and some how you said i was good lol im nothing compared to what you are
wow you just ....
wow
its you so good my god lol wow
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I called you AWESOME, not good (good would be an understatement)
I'm glad you liked it
I don't compare myself to other people because I'm know I'm nothing compared to them anyway
I'm glad that you're wowed by my poem lol
Thank you!
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This has amazing imagary. You did a geat job of telling how you felt, and protraying it. Nice job.
~Jade
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Thank you! Well I'm glad you saw what I was trying to tell, I wanted to say exactly what I had felt at the exact moment that it happened and everything so yeahh
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