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Raging Fire

It has no legs but it always dances.

It has no lungs but it depends on air.

It has no life but it still risks dying.

Creating flickering shadows,

It holds a majestic beauty none can understand.

The longer we watch the fire the larger it grows

untamed and unchallenged.

It spreads consuming everything in its path

but we still just watch.

 Only when the fire is entering our life

do we ever decide we need to act.

Once the fire reaches us it consumes us

taking our hearts and our souls and makes them

unrecognizable.

 It chars the very things

that make us who we are.

This fire which has long since

been our beginning,

will someday be

our end.

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  • Symphony
    September 30, 2008

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    [shudder] I will stand up and say I didn't enjoy this poem at all, BUT only because you did such a good job in writing it ; I have a phobia of fire, so I had to stop reading about half way down, if a little less, because the images it was bringing to mind were too scary to comprehend - so therefore surely your intent has been achived, to bring it alive...

    *scampers out*


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    It has no legs but always dances..and will someday be our end...Very well said.Flames do dance butI dont like the end part of fires destruciton.


  • Angel Felice Seals
    August 5, 2008

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    Loved it

    I loved this it had a nice flow such meaning behind your words i thought  it was well wrote and full of soul and emotions well done kepp it flowing and thanks for joing I look fowared to rerading more of your work

  • kimberlee meredith
    August 5, 2008

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    Wow..

    This is a very good poem.  I really like the first three lines, good "buts"!!
    Even more the last four lines,

    "This fire which has long since
    been our beginning,
    will someday be
    our end"

     

    Stunning....in word choice and in meaning.

    I really enjoyed reading this, twice!

     

     


  • HopelessPoet1087
    August 5, 2008
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    i like this poem. it has a certain flow to it...

    great job


  • sailor ptolema
    July 21, 2008
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    Ok; logistics:

    you use 'it' way too many times. I know you want it to read like a riddle, but after awhile; i felt the only thing i was reading was 'it' .
    And you overuse 'fire'...it detracts from the poem.

    I felt the ending was weak...
    I do like the form though, it's clean, and as a general rule i dislike center-aligned poems.

    ~Pt

  • celadia
    July 21, 2008

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    It was like a riddle at the start which peaked my interest but since I'm no good at riddles I was relieved when you provided the answer. I like this poem.


  • Sweet Sorrow
    June 20, 2008
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    Excellent! thank you for sharing


  • xX-Morephine-Xx
    June 20, 2008

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    Beautiful

    I am personally intrigued by fire, and I love the way you described it. It truly amazes me, and that is why I enjoyed your write so much. Amazing job.

    <3 ~(Chanted)~


  • KayJay
    June 19, 2008
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    Nicely written... smooth in flow and while a bit negative, given the situation we find ourselves in... who can blame you? (LOL) I really enjoyed the "completeness" of this... it didn't leave you hanging but told a complete story. Well done and good luck...
    Ken


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    I love the first 9 lines and how you describe fire. The rest is good too but I have a much more positive outlook on our final end! ***Pam***


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    At first I thought this was a description of fire. The metaphorical element took over as I read. It was a good method you used and the lines.
    It chars the very things
    that make us who we are.
    were my favorites.

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