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Fine Petticoats Of Ruffled Earth

 

 

 

 

 

Slight suggestions of vitality dance.

 

Luxuriant activity coolly blows

across fresh smiles and delicious whirlpools.

 

Breath of me, washing souls in other times,

energetic or lazily roaming

the smooth bones of past, present and future.

 

Schizophrenic wind am I, loftily

superior to breezy mood buildings,

destruction devours man's creation

in instantaneous shows of power.

 

Or I am gentle on your pastel skin,

mellow exhalation, heaven's whispers,

a spiritual presence which lifts hearts

into rippling beauty; leaves of love,

sweet perception's in eyes that swirl freedom.

 

I can uproot trees and toss them around

as if they were nothing but frightened twigs,

or move flower heads with passionate sighs

in wild gardens, fields full of colour, bright,

petals will shake with sensations given

while light laughter transverses evensong.

 

Nature's fine petticoats of ruffled earth

are guarded or exposed by my caprice,

I scratch waves upon seas as easily

as on a small pond's dimpled sereneness,

an invisible voice, a paradox,

for my actions are witnessed every day,

your feeble attempts to chain me will fail.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    October 27
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  • Nom de Plume
    October 11

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    its all been said about your imagery below me...conforming is such a lowering of standards..
    Cheers


  • spideracer gold member
    October 11

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    Awesome imagery, beautiful emotions throughout. Your poetry in the hands of an artist, one who paints, would become such awesome paintings to grace art galleries around the world. For such is your imagery, such to aspire to. Yes I agree you are a poetic genius. Take care and keep writing the brilliance.

    • individuality gold member
      October 11
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      I Am An Angel
      "I am an angel." Said Samuel Rose,
      his toes had a little bell on each one,
      they did not smell at all and if anyone
      mentioned they did he would savage
      them with a woollen welcome mat.
      He was pretty fat was Samuel
      and had a birth-mark on his park;
      that is slang for his bottom, you know!
      Summers would come and go with ease
      and his friend, Mike, he would visit
      on his bike, he always called him Sam,
      he would lie all the time then die
      when Jake; the tiny three-legged dog,
      barked at him that he was a big fake.

  • poetofda21stcentury
    October 4

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    Awesome

    a wonderful poem from begining to end .You never cease
    to amaze me in your writes You have a poetic genius for
    metaphor and simile. I have always enjoyed your
    poetry from day 1.Keep on penning poet. Don't ever stop.


    XXXrickXXX

  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    October 2

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    Wow = your descriptions and imagery always wow's me. It is from an extraordinarily beautiful mind that this comes from. I love it


  • mgmc gold member
    September 29

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    Another wonderful poem with amazing imagery. Some of my favorite phrases include "schizophrenic wind,""breezy mood buildings, and "scratch waves upon seas." Amazing work!


  • AlexandraHamilton
    September 27

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    Poetically lovely. There is a treasure in each line of this, and the descriptions you wrote are beautiful. This made me smile to read. Good luck in the contest.


  • Melodies
    September 27
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    I already clapped this poem before and anyway, you would forget because you have like nearly 100 comments here.

  • Melodies
    September 27

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    I couldn't find the puzzle in this poem 'cos it is extra, extra hard and I am just a little girl poet. Anyhow, my lollipop is used up and I don't have any more strength for looking for the puzzle now. After Halloween I will have lots more sweets. I can't wait THAT long, though. My favorite line is the petticoat line because that is a really good word and reminds me of dancing girls with long legs. I look like that, by the way, but you can't tell on the computer, 'cept I am not wearing a petticoat. <<< that is me. I love your poem, you know.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    September 19
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    Nature can be beautiful, but also it can be cruel as we witness it's wrath...I was also thinking of the temperament of we as poets, how our moods too can change from the sublime to the dark side...Our pen and emotions have the power to change as the wind.Such imagery and such an expressive write!


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    September 8

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    What a fantastic way to inflect humanity into nature - your word usage is beautiful and some of the pairings seem so awkward and yet, fit so perfectly together...Read aloud this poem flows seamlessly and the ending was unexpected and divine. If this is your usual method of writing - consider me a fan!

    Best of luck,
    Bean Sidh


  • Net
    August 26

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    wow! schizophrenic wind! I was certainly blown away by it!

    '"I scratch waves upon seas" "an invisible voice" "frightened twigs"

    Some beautiful descriptions of something you cannot see. How amazing is that!

  • Adele Ellen Bakker
    August 22
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    Sorry

    You did not read my instructions.


  • Ami
    July 22

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    Loved the last stanza Amazing
    thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck

    -♥Amy♥


  • walkingstick98
    July 20

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    oh this was really good, you have a beautiful way of putting something so simple but yet so intriguing. Good job with this and good luck in the contest


  • Shadow Anonymised gold member
    July 18
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    pretty damn mind meltingly amazing.


  • glenn shannon silver member
    July 10

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    this near blew me away powerful poem with lots of gusto and it is true we cannot harbopur the wind but we can use it to make good energy but it still remains wind


  • Discoveria
    June 18

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    Excellent poem. "Schizophrenic wind" particularly stood out for me - it really captures the unpredictable and volatile nature of the wind and its effects. Also "I scratch waves upon seas". I didn't anticipate the ending, and was somewhat taken aback - it seems to abruptly introduce the idea of a conflict between the wind and human interests, and contrasts with the carefree tone of most of the rest of the poem.


  • Denerica
    June 3

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    The last two stanzas show the power of God crontroling the mighty seas, captivating words. Thanks for entering. BLessings.


  • Horcrux.Breathing
    May 16

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    woawI love this, however you need to put the prompt in your author notes aswell as "I take back all the e-pops" or I WILL dq you
    thankyou for entering


  • Antebellum
    May 15
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    beautiful.

  • Feathered Motion
    May 3
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    Yes.

  • Just a poet gold member
    April 7
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    sorry missed these

  • Just a poet gold member
    April 7

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    An interesting poem but I am not clear in what way it is inspired by the idea of reading poetry in a hot bath.

  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 15

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    Ah...

    Like a gust of wind taking my breath away, you engage the suspense of taking another breath as you engage my mind with images all the way through...Truly you are an artist with your pen! Spirited write, that cannot be chained down by anyone...As free as the wind that blows you carry us to your destination which is sheer delight and amazement at this work.....Keep penning artist! Boookmarked!

  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 15
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    Ah...

    Like a gust of wind taking my breath away, you engage the suspense of taking another breath as you engage my mind with images all the way through...Truly you are an artist with your pen! Spirited write, that cannot be chained down by anyone...As free as the wind that blows you carry us to your destination which is sheer delight and amazement at this work.....Keep penning artist! Boookmarked!


  • anaisnais
    March 15

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    Brilliant! Such intensive flight for freedom as your words dance delightfully across the page! A wonderfully relaxing read.


  • anna3
    March 15
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    great

    For sure you are very gentle on my pastel skin beautiful imaginary write


  • Room without doors gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Outstanding

    This is a vital poem full of texture and deft imagery. You are creative with so much strength in your writing. This is an impressive poem that speaks out.


  • BehindTheShadow
    July 9, 2008

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    I read this before, but second time round it was still amazing! Just once I wish I could bang out something as creative as your writings. Keep up the great work, I love reading you and getting lost in whatever world you create for me.

  • SueRee
    July 9, 2008
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    Wonderfully Outside the Box

    After re-reading this several times, I'm captured by your pacing and the dynamics of the verses.
    I'll keep it to read later, with the verses in reverse order, from the unchained power down to coolly blowing across fresh smiles.
    Thanks for "blowing" my mind a bit!


  • A Citys Ember
    July 9, 2008
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    amazing, i'm about speechless. absolutley amazing !


  • after-silence
    July 8, 2008

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    Wow! This poem is really incredible. I love the imagery so much, especially in the last two stanzas. Such beautiful wording! Great job.

    This is my favorite part:

    "I can uproot trees and toss them around
    as if they were nothing but frightened twigs,
    or move flower heads with passionate sighs
    in wild gardens, fields full of colour, bright,
    petals will shake with sensations given
    while light laughter transverses evensong."

    I also think the whole "schizophrenic wind" part is really creative. This poem is truly brilliant.


  • MaskedStranger
    July 8, 2008
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    this is beautiful your such a great write


  • ShaShay
    July 8, 2008
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    or move flower heads with passionate sighsin wild gardens, fields full of colour, bright,
    petals will shake with sensations given
    while light laughter transverses evensong.

    I esp. liked this part. I loved the entire piece, had a strong yet gentle feel to nit. Very good job. Pen on...





  • poetesscribe1
    June 30, 2008
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    Marvellous!

    always a stunning read when I visit you...a pleasure to read and enjoy!...smiles..xoxo...PS


  • sailor ptolema
    June 29, 2008

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    for some reason..this really pulled on my heart strings....and seemed so much more powerful as I listen to Josh Groban
    another divine creation.

    and schizophrenic wind...wildy unpredictable...and sometimes it seems that the winds whispers to you....haunting line!

    all my best!!

    this part was especially lovely: "Or I am gentle on your pastel skin,
    mellow exhalation, heaven's whispers,
    a spiritual presence which lifts hearts
    into rippling beauty; leaves of love,
    sweet perception's in eyes that swirl freedom.>>>

    ~S.P.


    a


  • Harrisham Minhas
    June 24, 2008

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    This is a beautiful poem with a profound message.
    It displays some images of nature vividly.
    I like the title "Fine Petticoats Of Ruffled Earth", its interesting.




  • Sunrisen Traveler
    June 23, 2008

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    This poem gets stronger and stronger with every stanza. Great use of imagery and voice. Powerful and grabbing.

    I really like how you set up the stanzas, each line seems so carefully yet effortlessly structured. I know this may not be the most helpful, but something about the fourth stanza was awkward, particularly the first two lines. Maybe it was word choice? Not sure.

    Over all, though, very nice!


  • Hetha gold member
    June 22, 2008
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    So well thought out, deep, full of amazing imagery, and yet very comprehensible. It's not often, that someone grabs my attention, makes me stop, think, and ponder such powerful words. I'm reluctant to leave this page. You did very well here, and you have me stunned completely. That's difficult for anyone to do. However as much as I would like to stay, I cannot.


  • enitsirhC
    June 22, 2008
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    This is written very beautifully



    "Schizophrenic wind am I, loftily

    superior to breezy mood buildings,

    destruction devours man's creation

    in instantaneous shows of power."


    ^^^My favorite part!
    You have a wonderful talent
    Keep writing!




  • Christina-is-crazy
    June 22, 2008

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    What a beautiful poem.

    sweet perception's in eyes that swirl freedom

    I really like that line.

    Its beautiful.

    I love your use of imagery.

    Keep up the good work.

    ♥ Christina


  • stylization
    June 22, 2008
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    This was gorgeous. Fantastic imagery- "schitzophrenic wind," "fine petticoats of ruffled earth," "I can uproot trees and toss them around
    as if they were nothing but frightened twigs,
    or move flower heads with passionate sighs..."
    Beautiful write and very eloquent.

  • ShaShay
    June 22, 2008
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    Beautiful

    Such beautiful imagery. You did a marvelous job here. I especially liked
    Or I am gentle on your pastel skin,

    mellow exhalation, heaven's whispers,

    a spiritual presence which lifts hearts

    into rippling beauty; leaves of love,

    sweet perception's in eyes that swirl freedom.


  • libithina
    June 21, 2008

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    'gentle on your pastel skin'

    'uproot tree . as if they were nothing .. but frightened twigs' such imagery of strength.

    'move flower heads with passionate sighs .. colour bright.. petals.. shake .. while light laughter transeverses evensong'
    'natures fine petticoats of ruffled earth'

    never to be pinned down..unpredictable
    wild but warm soft soothing touch..

    I Marvel in awe at it all!!!

    Exquisite!! s s

    s


  • sarajaneUK
    June 21, 2008
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    a new word to fall in love with...caprice. excellent write

  • chiefmac
    June 21, 2008
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    Great Work

    The power here unquestioned, the paradox of oneself and mankind, where the kindest touch can bring a whirlwind of emotion. Tear life from the ground by the roots or swirl the beauty of sweet perception as passion. The metphors display passions strength compelling for the reader to struggle with grasping for quiet voice from within.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    June 20, 2008

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    This poem is so on timeas in my part of the world our space has been invaded by floods, nature is at work in all of her fine colorslol


  • CreativeVibes
    June 19, 2008

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    WoW!

    You wouldn't be Native Indian by chance? Very well
    done...Native or not...it was a picture well painted!


  • frownsnfreckles
    June 19, 2008

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    'I can uproot trees and toss them around

    as if they were nothing but frightened twigs,

    or move flower heads with passionate sighs

    in wild gardens, fields full of colour, bright,

    petals will shake with sensations given

    while light laughter transverses evensong.



    Nature's fine petticoats of ruffled earth

    are guarded or exposed by my caprice,

    I scratch waves upon seas as easily

    as on a small pond's dimpled sereneness,

    an invisible voice, a paradox,

    for my actions are witnessed every day,

    your feeble attempts to chain me will fail.'

    sheer brilliance!


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    June 18, 2008
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    Beautiful images that appear and disappear on the page (like the wind)!


  • Kiran silver member
    June 18, 2008

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    A lot of emotions in this piece, I loved the imagery! This is an outstanding poem!


  • MelodiousDreaming
    June 18, 2008
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    Absolutely brilliant, you've captured my breath once again!


  • BehindTheShadow
    June 17, 2008
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    I love the last line... your feeble attempts to chain me will fail...Bam! Great job!


  • cheaphotelsign
    June 17, 2008

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    i knew this would rock when i read the title...outstanding. perfect personification...intense in imagery..vibrant in color and language. really dig this...alot. you are so damn good at what you do.


  • DeGraw
    June 17, 2008
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    Heaven Unleashed

    God?


  • ladame
    June 17, 2008

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    Many brilliant things to say about this. The choice of words is exquisite, and the tone is so lilting and calm with moments of tension - like nature itself - to name just two.

    I would like to think there is a concordance with my poem "Falling Leaf" in here somewhere...maybe you'd give me your opinion on something when you get time?

    Thanks for sharing this with us all.

    Sarah *inspired* - seriously considering nature being a slave to God with strange sexual imagery.


  • vici377
    June 17, 2008

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    wow..a totally wonderful pool of imagery..this is absolutely amazing..

    mellow exhalation, heaven's whispers,

    soft and delicate yet powerful and gripping when you need to be..just like the wind..thanx so much for sharing..blessings...namaste..


  • Blueskywonder
    June 17, 2008

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    Some great lines in this absolutely beautiful piece of poetry, expressed with proud elegance depicting the many natures of nature herself. It moves the reader along Wild and free, carrying clouds across a colourful haze of immagination. Masterful poetry! Thank-you for sharing your creative self with us

  • Melodies
    June 17, 2008
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    I am coming by again to add that I like it when you write about petticoats. Please write more petticoat poetry. Maybe pink petticoat poetry. Pretty pink petticoat poetry. YES!


  • queen Moderators member
    June 17, 2008

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    Everyone knows that i can rope the wind This is excellent pirate


  • LadyLavender gold member
    June 17, 2008
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    Despite all, to see the beauty anyway, is power in itself.


  • anna3
    June 17, 2008

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    Wonderful

    You can a lot! So various actions too there is a beauty in this how our mind can be great if it is free


  • righteousme
    June 17, 2008

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    this was a bit long for my taste... but a lovely piece nonetheless... thank you for your time and talent...

  • Melodies
    June 17, 2008
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    Beautifully said, fine Sir Poet. All lines leading to a lovely garden of gorgeous images. You are truly inspired and well spoken in this poem.

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