I sit on my bed
Quivering in the dark
All my friends are dead
My loved ones are screaming
Breaking me and my heart
I wish I were dreaming
I can’t shake this feeling
That is life stealing
Bodies hang from the ceiling
As my reality is reeling
The rest of society
Fears me
But no one can hear
My crippling anxiety
And no one believes
I’m the one living in fear
I hear it every night
Wisps of whispering
Maybe it’s all in my head
Even the monster under my bed
Are shivering
As they whimper in fright
Now the room goes black
Sweat permeates my back
As my securities crack
Fearing the impending attacks
I sit on my bed
Alone in the shadows
Waiting for the violence to beset
And the evil to churn
No one knows
About the silence in the closet
As the doorknob turns…
Author notes
enjoy.
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This is awesome
You have penned this well and yes indeed within the darkness who knows what lurks there .I wrote one yesterday called Roses For Sahra its real spooky
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sheesh! talk about starting with a bang?!
~shiver~
every little kid fears what's hiding in the closet and the trepidation that you have left me with here is OUTSTANDING!
well done - this was amazing!
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Wonderful take on the "boogie man"... glad he's moved to your house... used to scare the hell out me in my youth... Well done, sir...
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This is a very nicely wrought piece of work and the rhyme is well-handled. Congratulations May I suggest though that in the second short passage (stanza 5) rhyming on "-ack" you do not really need to have "attacks" in the plural. Do consider whether the "-s" really helps the poem here, or whether the sharper "k" sound of "attack" would be more effective.
You also have a grammatical error in stanza 4 - which is probably only a typo... Namely, you have a singular subject "monster" with plural verbs "are shivering" abnd "they whimper". I think you meant to put "monsters", but somehow left the "s" off.
Do remember that the spell-check device is a VEVY false friend... it will NOT pick up errors if they produce something that the software recognizes as a word (even if it is not the word you wanted!) while on the other hand it will try to "correct" rare words not programmed into it.
I regularly disable my spell-checker - and always advise other people to do the same. Unfortunately the beastly thing sneaks back on when the anti-virus software updates itself, so one has to remember to keep disabling it! -
Wow that ending rocks! So full of anguish and suspense. Your descriptions are wonderful, portrayed some awesome imagery. Not sure I like the fact you've left us dangling tho...I think a part 2 is in order
Superbly penned 
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