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Monotony: The Spice Of Life

Industrial house
And pitiful show
One union’s voice
We know
We know
We knew them once
So long ago
But they’re souls broke
We know
We know

Industrial house
And pitiful show
One union’s voice
We know
We know
We knew them once
So long ago
But they’re souls broke
We know
We know
 
Industrial house                                                  [HARDLY]
And pitiful show
One union’s voice  
We know
We know                                                    [HELP ME]
We knew them once                        
So long ago
But they’re souls broke                          [THERE DOING]
We know
We know

Industrial house
And pitiful show
One union’s voice
We know                            [WHAT?]
We know
We knew them once                                [THEY KNOW]
So long ago
But they’re souls broke                [HIDDEN]
We know
We know

Industrial house
And pitiful show                [REMAIN]
One union’s voice
We know
We know
We knew them once          [REMNANTS]
So long ago
But they’re souls broke[SHATTERED]
We know
[I KNOW]

Author notes

alrighty, i have looked this one over from my hastidly pasted work this morning.

this one is most indefinetly influenced by Sam Roberts song Bridge To Nowhere. which frightend me beyond all reason, for reasons your probably not thinking of, for 3 split seconds. i then went to my geography exam, where i spent the next two hours.

alright enjoy.

~theharvester

this is my first really expirimental poem tell me what you think

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  • Sweet--Sorrow
    July 19, 2008

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    fantastic,
    i almost think of Norma Raye, and as Silvos mentioned almost a chant, the not so subliminal messaging is a great asset. inperational. one of your best by far


  • Pixielated
    June 20, 2008

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    I love thise piece. The rhyme is great, the sinkepated rhythm and the jingle sound. It's almost like the old "They're coming to take me away hehe, hoho . . ."
    And I like the underlying message, and the title. Great piece! And good poetic form!


  • Silvos. silver member
    June 18, 2008

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    Great. Almost like a chant. I pictured little cancer patients with their baldened heads and sickening cough chanting this over and over. It's actually a really disturbing thought. Anyways, great poem through the power of repetition and flow. I definitely liked it! Write more?

    Take care,
    Silvos.


  • xcoldxtruthx
    June 17, 2008
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    i loved it! good job..even if u were in a hurry.

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