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Faith

Let go
Plane disappears
Air rushes through helmet
Parachute opens, God`s quiet
Step down

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  • Papillon1
    June 20, 2008

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    I recently had a vision of sliding down a tube fast, and not knowing what was on the other end. I didn't want to stop in the vision, but then I did, quickly, I moved on again. What I learned from your poem is that I was opening up to faith! Thanks!


  • Malabu
    June 19, 2008

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    for some reason the last line I thought slope or glide down...but still I like what you did with your cinquain...
    Mal

  • Bob 42 silver member
    June 17, 2008
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    Thank you

    Twenty parachutes would become hopelessly tangled.
    You have to have Faith in one, like God.
    Unless you want to walk a mile back to the airstrip,
    you have to steer the chute down.


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 17, 2008
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    It would definitely take a leap of faith that I certainly don't have to get me out of that plane, no matter if I had 20 parachutes on.

    I like line four, it suggests the peace after the chute opens. I would guess that after it successfully opens, the rest is just a peaceful glide to the earth.

    Thanks for entering the contest.