If i was a low life like you..
i would take my pain out on you..
Like you deserve..
i wanna crush you..
like you crushed me..
You hurt me for no good reason..
Now its time for Payback..
Revenge is a bitch..
But u had it coming..
So watch out boy cos im coming after you..
Author notes
This isnt really a poem. just what im feeling. comment me please..
Is this lame?
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oh yeah i've allready read this poem and it still speaks loud and true the second time through
keep up the writing
ɛiɜ ~Amy -
Just one thing to fix (in my opinion), on the last two lines you used "u" and "cos" I'm sorry but stuff like that drives me insane, so does uncapitalized "i"s. Sorry I'm a bit of a grammer freak at times, how you expressed your emotions is fantastic and since it flows like a poem, sounds like a poem, and is arranged like a poem it is indeed a poem. =) Great write.
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i think this works well as a poem, i think that its wonderful to speak your mind and you did a good job at it, i deffinatly do not think its lame i think it's deep, payback is deffenatly a bitch, keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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