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Stormy Weather


Thunder
pounding heartbeats
blazing colors strike cold
manifesting wrath into storm
combat








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  • Papillon1
    June 20

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    wow! I unlike Mr. Yem, happen to LOVE thunderstorms! You bring such life to the beauty of nature! BOOM! Great jo

  • Malabu
    June 19

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    heat of the moment comes to mind...thrust and palpatations to heat of passion...yow!
    another great cinquain


  • Kunjal
    June 18

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    'Electrifyingly' effective and good.. My applauses are out.. will come back.. Keep writing, Best wishes in the contest~
  • my dear one this breathes life and energy into nature's realms in its brevity. The elecrtifying lightshow of storms we have had this spring with all the tornados and flooding makes me think of the write as mortal kombat indeed. well done and many loving blessings always xxxx


  • poppa silver member
    June 18

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    Wonderful write....I read two interpretations into this....loving the imagery... good luck in the contest


  • Yemassee silver member
    June 17

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    I hate thunder and I hate lightning, and while yours is as much metaphor as it is literal, I hate them still.

    I like the power of your cinquain, "pounding," "blazing," "combat" are all very graphic words that are very important because word choice is at a premium in such a small space.

    I'm going to go hide under my bed now, just in case your poem brings about a real storm.


  • Gaze silver member
    June 17

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    I like thunders, and here you show such a strong image of it using very few words.
    Well done!

    Mari

  • I wish I could write as beautiful as this...much less keep it in form. Well done. Sensational! The word choice is absolutely wonderful. Good luck.

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