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addicted to love

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the slightest sound alerts your senses
a lingering scent causes your thoughts to drift
here in the quietness of your bedroom
you long for him to be there, lying next to you

helplessly astray in blissful abandonment
sleep is lost yet another night, but that is of no matter
longing for the very essence of your lover
if he can't be here in body then in spirit will have to do

closing your eyes, you can feel his hands, his lips
images flash in your mind's eye, causing you to smile
the thought of his gentle kiss makes you sweat
your body arching unrestrained as you imagine his touch

your lips so dry, in dire need of quenching
heart racing out of control, hands grabbing the sheets
every muscle tense with anticipation, desire
desperate for release, to scream in sheer delight

the love of your dearest one is your addiction
and you have absolutely no desire to be cleansed
knowing soon he'll return and your withdrawals will cease
your pent-up desires will end in climactic explosion

 

a quiet sigh escapes your lips and you can now relax
slipping off into a wonderful, passionate dream
in the morning you'll feel refreshed but still craving
it is your deepest need, baby, you're addicted to love

 

 

Author notes

Addicted to Love ~ Robert Palmer

Note: I approached this piece like an addict going through withdrawals, but in this case a woman desiring her lover so desperately it effects every part of her being.

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  • Silver Asylum
    September 2, 2008

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    Oh My!

    Wow...I loved this piece. I was listening to the song at the same time and it flows together really nicely. But mainly I liked it because you weren't raunchy with the semsual theme, just like the song, but you still made me want to wake my husband up...and well, you get the point, lol.

    My favorite part would definitely have to be the ending
    it was beautiful, strong, and tied everything together nicely. I also really liked the 3rd stanza as well.

    Extremely fabulous write...good luck in the contest

    ~*~Zenity

    ****

  • carole21
    July 31, 2008

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    very nice write for the prompt . . sensual . . liked "hopelessly astray in blissful abandonment" and "the love of your dearest one is your addiction" . . congrats on the trophy


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    July 26, 2008

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    You captured the longing so well. I can picture a wife married to a soldier, or prisoner, just waiting for her man. I really love this poem, up until the last line. The last line of course immediately made me think of that Robert Palmer (?) song, and made it a little gimmicky to me. That's not your fault, only mine having endured my teen years in the 80s, and I don't hold that against your lovely poem. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.


    whisper


    • Xianaria gold member
      July 26, 2008
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      funny you mention the palmer song - the original contest that this was written for was a song-titles prompt, and yep, that was my prompt. thank you for your comments ~ much appreciated.


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    July 3, 2008

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    this is very well written,
    i love the sensual longing and complete love,
    in this poem it is a very matured love poem,
    not like the teenage "he is my world" garbage,
    all my love, best of luck in the contest,
    kitty xxx


  • GypsyEyes
    July 3, 2008

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    i really can relate to this poem! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 22, 2008

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    I can really relate to this piece, as I was like that the other night, just longing for him to hold me, love me, kiss me, make love to me... I just wanted to feel him all over and feel the love, you know. Very expressive and sensual.


  • ennovy silver member
    June 22, 2008

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    you always get addicted to good stuff...sexy write...thanks for entering.....novy & Brazos


  • Brazos silver member
    June 22, 2008

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    Very strong, sensual, emotions in this write, well done!

    Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.
    Novy & Brazos


  • Galaxy2
    June 21, 2008

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    Vivid, imagintive, charming...

    'Your lips so dry, in dire need of quenching
    heart racing out of control, hands grabbing the sheets
    every muscle tense with anticipation, desire
    desperate for release, to scream in sheer delight'
    ...so well described!
    nice diction...

    I liked the tone, diction, description and the imaginative touches of the poem...

    Galaxy2

  • limechic
    June 21, 2008

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    i always felt like this with my ex...using thoughts and dreams to tide me over until the next time i could see him.

    this is really beautiful...great work!


  • Soft-Rain
    June 21, 2008

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    You have really outdone yourself. Whether shes is addicted to her love or a romantic full of fire fantasy. It's powerful dripping hot!!!

    closing your eyes, you can feel his hands, his lips
    images flash in your mind's eye, causing you to smile
    the thought of his gentle kiss makes you sweat
    your body arching unrestrained as you imagine his touch

    your lips so dry, in dire need of quenching
    heart racing out of control, hands grabbing the sheets
    every muscle tense with anticipation, desire
    desperate for release, to scream in sheer delight

    the love of your dearest one is your addiction
    and you have absolutely no desire to be cleansed
    knowing soon he'll return and your withdrawals will cease
    your pent-up desires will end in climactic explosion

    I need to go take a smoke now lol

    Love you,
    ~Lisa~

    • Xianaria gold member
      June 22, 2008
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      hi baby~

      just know that you are my inspiration...all i did was think of you and things you've expressed when we were apart...

      i love you~



      tim

  • hardeepb
    June 21, 2008

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    Love

    I wonder if my love feels this way...I always used to know what she thought...what she felt 24/7...now it is nothing but a mystery. I love her so and wish to always be by her side;

    "the love of your dearest one is your addiction
    and you have absolutely no desire to be cleansed
    knowing soon he'll return and your withdrawals will cease
    your pent-up desires will end in climactic explosion"

    I dream of this; I just may be addicted to her. Beautiful artistry and comparison to a drug fiend. 9/10!

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