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when she couldn't cross her heart





boxing gloves filled
with bitter fists:

at fifteen she felt like a fighter,
fightin’ to lose.

anger ignited
by unfortunate fate
of first relationship:

packed bags; tearful farewell-

fire in her eyes;
watching life
burn like a wooden bridge-

knocked out from future’s flames-

collapsing

into lava flows
of frustration















Author notes

-As for this picture: go down to the bottom of this note section to the link [I apologize - it is a very long link] and after you have done that, go down to the last paragraph just above the picture with all of those girl-models. Once you are there, look for the “here” link - click it, and it will lead you to Christian’s collection for the final round. Do not click out of this page, you will be coming back to it for every other poem I write.

[5/13 - basically, the story continues. She met a guy and it didn't work. The attitude of this poem was inspired more by the body language of the model - and the clothing made me think of something angry, unhappy. So - because the relationship didn't work, she became an angry person.]

I chose those set of pictures, because I felt there was a story - the dresses just became more complex each time; sometimes in strange, grotesque ways. I wanted to bring those elements to life in a poetic story.

http://images.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://fashionesedaily.com/blog/wp-content/uploads/2008/03/projectrunways.jpg&imgrefurl=http://fashionesedaily.com/blog/2008/03/05/project-runway-season-4-finale/&h=749&w=480&sz=284&hl=en&start=165&um=1&tbnid=9vmgqDd8sb_RkM:&tbnh=141&tbnw=90&prev=/images%3Fq%3DProject%2BRunway%2Bseason%2B4:%2BRunway%2BDesigns%2B4%26start%3D162%26ndsp%3D18%26um%3D1%26hl%3Den%26rls%3DSNYI,SNYI:2005-33,SNYI:en%26sa%3DN


For Project Poetry - Round Six [Top 8]

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  • Never Fall in Love
    June 22, 2008

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    I liked this better

    Although: "fighter, fightin'" is a bit awkward to read. How about you find a synonym for the verb?

    But really good


    • Tangled Angle
      June 22, 2008
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      lol thanks :]

      i actually liked that part. i dont know, i just thought it sounded cool. -shrug-


  • Randomly Beautiful
    June 17, 2008

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    Pizzaburgers? You bring the pepsi... Good stuff Tyler.